In the web of broken promises and lies,
A friend turned foe before my eyes.
Betrayed and left to stand alone,
A victim of the garden's unknown.
The orphans left with none to care,
Lost in the thorns and the weeds that ensnare.
Their hearts yearn for love and light,
But society's garden brings only blight.
The young ones, full of hope and dreams,
Lured into darkness by society's schemes.
Their minds clouded by poisonous vines,
And the toxic fruits that the garden provides.
In the barren fields and strife,
The garden of society is rife.
With treacherous paths that lead to pain,
And thorny bushes that leave us slain.
But we must seek the hidden gems,
The flowers bloom amidst the hem.
For amid the garden's gloom,
Lies the beauty that can lift us from our doom.
So let us tend the garden with devotion,
Planting seeds with nurturing emotion,
For in time, they'll grow and bear,
Fruits of love that we can all share.
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Author:
Wuod Mwalimu (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: May 11th, 2023 17:03
- Comment from author about the poem: Hope on the horizon
- Category: Reflection
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Comments2
This is quite good.It suffers one major fault however.While the metaphors are good they are not explained and so drown the meaning.That's a shame because there is real talent here
'So let us tend the garden with devotion,
Planting seeds with nurturing emotion,'
Amen!
(I feel Voltaire would agree)
thanks for sharing
(oh and please ignore 'critique'
asking you 'to explain'
metaphors, in a poem...
that's juts the level of their ignorance!
do you
let no one dictate your path)
Noted with thanks🙏
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