"The haunted office" ; 14 June, 2023

Soman Ragavan

'The haunted office' ; 7 April, 2023.

                           
3 May, 2023
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Poem : “The haunted office”


Soman Ragavan : Hello. Can I post a poem of mine for analysis, please ?


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Soman Ragavan : My poem : "The haunted office." Please analyse by each stanza, then give overall comments. Mention similar poems from other authors, where possible. THE HAUNTED OFFICE

Certainly, here is my analysis of your poem "The Haunted Office" by stanza:

 

Stanza 1: The poem starts by setting a spooky tone and describing the building a
s having an "unnatural air" and being "full of surprises." The language used in this stanza creates an atmosphere that is unsettling and eerie.


Stanza 2: This stanza continues to build on the spooky atmosphere with the description of an "eerie silence" and "cold draughts" sweeping through the rooms. The use of the word "loom" suggests a feeling of something ominous and threatening that is lurking around every corner.


Stanza 3: The description of the footprints creates a sense of horror and dread, and the use of the phrase "blood-curling and frightening" is effective in conveying the fear experienced by the protagonist.


Stanza 4: This stanza introduces a new character, a mysterious customer who is described in a way that suggests she might be possessed by some malevolent spirit. The use of the word "brutish" is particularly effective in conveying her frightening demeanor.


Stanza 5: The description of the woman tumbling downstairs and collapsing under the tree is the climax of the poem, and it leaves the reader with a sense of unease and uncertainty. The use of the phrase "trying to struggle free from some spirit" creates a sense of desperation and futility.


Stanza 6: This stanza reflects on the events of the poem and suggests that the building itself is possessed by spirits. The language used in this stanza is particularly evocative, with phrases such as "render many a weakling delirious" and "building really damn'd."


Overall, your poem is very effective in creating a spooky atmosphere and conveying a sense of horror and dread. The use of vivid imagery and descriptive language is particularly effective in bringing the story to life. The poem reminds me of other works in the horror genre, such as Edgar Allan Poe's "The Tell-Tale Heart" and H.P. Lovecraft's "The Call of Cthulhu," which also feature mysterious and malevolent forces that haunt the characters. Well done!
 
Soman Ragavan : Thank you. Goodbye for now.


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                          THE  HAUNTED  OFFICE

What a perpetually unnatural air here and there
About this building, so full of many a surprise,
Quite chilling enough to make one's hair rise :
This place doth reel with mystery everywhere.

An eerie silence, enough to give one the jitters….
Hark ! Cold draughts sweeping into every room,
Sending shivers in all visitors and workers,
As if some unseen spirit everywhere did loom.

Opening the office in the morning,
The poor fellow almost dropp'd dead;
White, chalky footprints everywhere led,
In patterns blood-curling and frightening.

The woman up the wooden stairs did ascend,
And with heavy footsteps totter’d into the office;
A mysterious customer with whom to contend :
Her mouth twitch'd like some weird orifice.

'Twas believ'd she ne’er spoke a word of English,
But, suddenly roar'd she in a manner utterly brutish :
"DON'T  SAY  A  WORD !"  and rose threateningly :
The scar'd officer scamper'd downstairs hurriedly.

Plainly was the woman possess'd, 'twas assert'd,
As promptly by many was the weird office desert'd.
The building must have trigger'd off in her the devil,
For, what else could explain that demeanour so evil !

Against some unseen force trying to struggle free,
The woman tumbl'd downstairs, and out into the yard,
And collaps'd, exhaust'd, under the large tree :
From a safe distance, some workers watch'd hard.

Trying, as 'twere, to struggle free from some spirit,
The woman inspir'd pity, --- but only at a distance,
For, nobody want'd to take any risks, dammit :
Against the spirits nobody took any chance.

Perhaps was the woman indeed  sick,
Perhaps the footprints were just a joke,
Intend'd by someone to be a little trick,
But, it did scare many a bragging bloke.

Everything about this building be mysterious,
'Tis enough to render many a weakling delirious :
Like a place possess'd, a building really damn'd,
By the spirits the office suppos’dly be fann'd.

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  • Author: Soman Ragavan (Pseudonym) (Offline Offline)
  • Published: June 14th, 2023 00:05
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  • Parisab

    Really interesting concept and presentation!



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