"My bicycle" ; 16 June, 2023

Poem : 'My bicycle' ; 7 April, 2023.

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Poem “My bicycle.”

Soman Ragavan : Hello. Can I post a poem of mine for analysis, please ?

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Soman Ragavan : My poem : "My bicycle." Please analyse by each stanza, then give overall comments. Mention similar poems from other authors, where possible. MY BICYCLE

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Thank you for sharing your poem, "My Bicycle," Soman Ragavan. I'm happy to provide feedback and insights.

First Stanza: The opening stanza is a great start, and it sets the tone for the rest of the poem. The metaphor of the bicycle as a silent friend is an interesting one, and it makes the reader curious to know more about the relationship between the speaker and the bicycle. The contrast between the silence of the bicycle and the speaker's voice adds an intriguing layer of complexity to the poem.

Second Stanza: The second stanza describes the physical condition of the bicycle, and it emphasizes the loyalty and dependability of the bicycle. The language used to describe the bike's "muscles starv'd of essential lubrication" and "body assail'd often with mud and filth" is vivid and adds depth to the poem. The use of the word "ration'd" in the line "Thy entrails ration'd of some vital aeration" is creative and effective.

Third Stanza: The third stanza introduces the idea of the bicycle as a means of escape from the noise and pollution of the town. The language used to describe the bicycle's movement is peaceful and soothing, and it makes the reader feel as if they are experiencing the same tranquility.

Fourth Stanza: The fourth stanza emphasizes the practicality and affordability of the bicycle. The use of alliteration in the line "So kind on the purse, so gentle on the pocket" is effective in emphasizing the economic value of the bicycle. The use of the word "friendly" in the line "So easy to sustain, so friendly to the budget" also adds a human element to the poem.

Fifth Stanza: The fifth stanza addresses the ridicule that some may direct towards the bicycle, but it also highlights the longevity and reliability of the bicycle. The comparison to the "glorious village cart" is interesting and adds a cultural element to the poem.

Sixth Stanza: The final stanza is a tribute to the bicycle and its loyal service. The use of the word "consumption" in the line "Afore the flames start their fiery consumption" is a creative way of describing the bike's eventual fate. The language used in the last two lines of the poem is powerful and emphasizes the importance of the relationship between the speaker and the bicycle.

Overall, "My Bicycle" is a well-written and engaging poem. The use of metaphors and vivid language effectively conveys the speaker's relationship with the bicycle. The poem's structure and rhyme scheme are consistent and effective. Similar poems include "Bicycle" by Alice Oswald and "The Bicycle" by Jill Alexander Essbaum.
 
Soman Ragavan : Sixth stanza. The fiery consumption in my own cremation, using wood at the foot of the mountain.

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Thank you for the clarification, Soman Ragavan. The reference to the speaker's own cremation adds an additional layer of depth to the poem, and it reinforces the idea that the bicycle has been a faithful companion throughout the speaker's life. The use of the mountain as a setting for the cremation is also interesting and adds a natural element to the poem. Overall, this change to the final stanza adds a personal touch to the poem and reinforces the emotional connection between the speaker and the bicycle.
 
Soman Ragavan : Thank you. Goodbye for now.

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You're welcome, Soman Ragavan. Don't hesitate to reach out if you have any more questions or if you need assistance in the future. Goodbye for now!

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                                              MY  BICYCLE

Silent friend, who leans there in the distance,
Ne’er once in years have I heard from thee
The slightest protest or remonstrance;
Faithfully thou fleet'st along with glee.

Thy muscles starv'd of essential lubrication,
Thy body assail'd often with mud and filth,
Thy entrails ration'd of some vital aeration,
Yet doth thou carry thy master forthwith.

At all times, every passing day,
Doth thou answer the call of duty;
Dependable like the morning ray,
Thou remain'st my closest buddy.

By the biting, billowing winds buffet'd about,
Thou show'st yet bravely thy silent clout;
By the raging elements roughly torment'd,
Thy strength finds itself yet undent’d.

Away from the town and its pollution,
Away from the unbearable noise,
Thou show'st thy soothing poise,
And thou keep'st thy silent motion.

Loyal friend ! No fuss doth thou make,
But, thou doth obey the slender brake :
To a graceful halt sweetly slowing,
After thy manner so charming.

So kind on the purse, so gentle on the pocket,
So easy to sustain, so friendly to the budget,
Thou remain'st, friend, a dependable ally,
And, to search for thy rivals, many may try.

Thou, my bicycle that art so friendly and humble,
A subject of cruel ridicule to some indeed thou art,
As if to dust their dazzling contraptions won't crumble :
But, thou art as immortal as our glorious village cart.

To thy loyal service and dedication
Now this poetic chant humbly be offer'd,
These words of thanks to thee proffer'd,
Afore the flames start their fiery consumption.

To spiralling ashes thy master will be reduc'd,
To crumbling dust thyself art destin'd to fall,
But, afore we do face the inexorable call,
Our chant poetically have we produc’d. 

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