Deep in the darkness of my mind,
I search for light, but none I find,
Days to weeks and weeks to years,
My fears and worries become my peers.
The world may spin, but my feet are stuck,
A prisoner to this feeling, it's just my luck
My thoughts they strike with new lethality,
And I lose myself in this mentality.
Those years pass by, still I am drawn,
Drowning in my burning dawn
Into the grip of crippling doubt,
How is it this is the only route?
The chains that bind me may seem strong,
But I refuse to linger for long.
To rid the heart of fear's abyss
It’s the little things I miss.
My soul calls to the unknown,
Aching for space to call my own.
I summon the courage to take control,
To reach out and make myself whole.
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Author:
Kinsey Peterson (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I don't typically write with rhymes and it was very strange to use this type of language. However- I feel that broadening my skills is important so please leave some critique :)
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Hello ) I think you have done well with the rhyming it’s a good poem which flows nicely .. tho there’s sadness in it .
I never use rhyming much in mine either .. it’s not something I often think of trying to do
thank you love for the kind words
I rarely write in rhyme myself .. but that doesn't mean I favour prose, in fact I admire those who can and do .. closings Xlll is a well crafted poem that reads well and sounds good in my head .. it additionally looks good on the page and flows perfectly .. all in all I would suggest you give yourself a pat on the back .. Neville
the smile that shows up on my face whenever i see that you are commenting is my favourite part of the day
how very kind, then I am indeed truly blessed .. 🌹x
fantaboulous flow
I slide from syllable to line
like a waterfall, free
of pebbles or jagged rock
driven, by waves of poetic rhyme
indeed
we must free our wings of creativity
to reach heights we never knew
we could dream, let alone achieve
just a joy to watch you soar
oh most dexterous Poet
(I bow to your superior talent)
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