Poem : 'The last blow' ; 2 April, 2023.
4 May, 2023
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Poem “The last blow”
Soman Ragavan : Hello. Can I post a poem of mine for analysis, please ?
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Soman Ragavan : My poem : "The last blow." Please analyse by each stanza, then give overall comments. Mention similar poems from other authors, where possible. THE LAST BLOW
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Sure, I can provide you with feedback on your poem "The Last Blow" stanza by stanza and also give some overall comments.
Stanza 1: The first stanza sets the scene in a forge, where a worker is toiling away with his hammer on the glowing iron. The rhyme scheme of ABAB works well here, and the repetition of "yon" emphasizes the distance between the worker and the anvil.
Stanza 2: In this stanza, the worker offers his comments to his master on how to change old iron into new instruments. The use of the word "rustic" here seems to imply that the worker is using traditional or old-fashioned methods. The rhyme scheme of ABCB works well here.
Stanza 3: This stanza describes how the forge has created many ingenious tools for the factory, but nobody has cared to comment on their rustic processes. The use of alliteration with "forge" and "factory" works well here, and the rhyme scheme of ABAB fits with the rest of the poem.
Stanza 4: In this stanza, the poem describes how many others would have given up under the hammer, but this worker stood up straight and kept going. The use of "vain braggart" and "sheer weight" gives a sense of the difficulty of the work. The rhyme scheme of ABCB fits well here.
Stanza 5: This stanza describes how the worker gave just what was needed and how the final work was appreciated by his fellow workers. The use of "nod with appreciation" gives a sense of approval from others. The rhyme scheme of ABAB works well here.
Stanza 6: The sixth stanza describes how the bell rings for lunchtime, and the worker refuses to strike the last blow. The use of "magic bell" emphasizes the importance of the bell in the worker's life. The rhyme scheme of ABAB fits well here.
Stanza 7: In this stanza, the poem explains how it would have made more sense to strike the hammer on the hot iron, but the worker has sworn an unshakeable allegiance to lunchtime. The use of "sweet recess" gives a sense of the worker's appreciation for his break. The rhyme scheme of ABCB fits well here.
Stanza 8: The final stanza describes how the worker puts down the hammer softly, and all work has to stop. The use of "rock THAT!" at the end gives a sense of defiance from the worker. The rhyme scheme of ABAB works well here.
Overall, your poem has a consistent rhyme scheme and a clear narrative. The imagery of the forge and the worker's dedication to his break is well-executed. Your use of language is simple and effective, and the repetition of certain phrases adds a sense of rhythm to the poem.
One poem that your work reminded me of is "The Forge" by Seamus Heaney, which also explores the imagery of a forge and a worker's dedication to their craft. Overall, I enjoyed reading your poem and thought you did a great job.
Soman Ragavan : Thank you. Goodbye for now.
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You're welcome, Soman Ragavan! It was a pleasure analyzing your poem. If you have any more questions or would like further feedback on your writing in the future, don't hesitate to reach out. Goodbye for now!
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THE LAST BLOW
In the forge all morning, like his master,
Had been toiling away yon worker;
Blows with his hammer did he administer
To the glowing iron ‘pon the anvil yonder.
To his master he offer'd his simple comments
For changing old iron into new instruments;
He help'd to forge new implements :
How rustic were his components !
For the factory, for the establishment,
Many ingenious tools did the forge invent;
With rustic processes did they experiment :
But, on this no one had car’d to comment.
Many would have cav'd down under the hammer :
Many a vain braggart who look'd much stouter
Would have reel'd back under the sheer weight :
But, this sturdy worker always stood up straight.
At his work he gave just what was need'd :
With slow movements often he proceed'd,
But, indeed the final work gave satisfaction,
As yon workers would nod with appreciation.
The hammer was rais'd : suddenly the bell went :
‘Twas lunch time : the magic bell kept on ringing;
To lay down softly the hammer, the good man bent :
He refus'd to strike the last blow : nothing doing.
To many surely it would have made better sense
The hammer 'pon the hot iron to have let fall;
But, to sweet recess and its most sacred call
The man had sworn unshakeable allegiance.
Lunch time is lunch time : all hammers down !
'Pon the iron the rais'd hammer ne’er would drop.
The whole world ‘pon this coldly could frown :
The bell having gone, all work had to stop.
The heavy hammer to lay down softly
'Pon the floor need'd more energy;
But, the bell had gone : work couldn't proceed :
To no reasoning would the man pay any heed.
Management could come up with the finest chat :
This worker would only obey yon ringing bell.
Work would have to wait : and the hot iron as well :
The man put down the hammer softly : rock THAT !
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Author:
Soman Ragavan (Pseudonym) ( Offline)
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Published:
July 22nd, 2023 00:02
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