As she tosses her hair
Perfumed scent fills the air
She reveals just a little more skin
Sparkling eyes hold my gaze
Like a mouse in a maze
This lost soul now quite fancies a win
When her mouth cracks a smile
I just stand there a while
overdosing on beauty so sweet
Light reflects from her nails
I doubt she ever fails
To have men simply fall at her feet
Though I've never been smooth
Feel I must make my move
But the best I come up with is hi
As she giggles and turns
And my face really burns
Her response to my best line is bye
Did I blow my big chance
of a whirlwind romance
Was this moment a cruel twist of fate
Guess I'll keep marching on
That's another chance gone
Maybe "hl" needs some work for a date
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peto (
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A Good and engaging writing , peto 🙂 sometimes it’s difficult to make conversation of feeling shy or anxious ,
I especially like the mention of a mouse in a maze and light reflecting from her nails
A nicely written poem
Thank you very much Violet
Your support and encouragement are inspiring
Much obliged
Such an in-depth look at your muse with full commitment and vulnerability-pure sentiments never fail in poetry in my opinion
Or in comments
Appreciate such a kind comment
Many thanks
Very nice! Vulnerable! You don't have to be smooth...just be you. If hi is all you got...and it's meant to be, that will be enough!! Maybe the giggle means you left an impression, and deep down she's shy too?
Rough as a badgers arse over here LIZ
Stood me in good stead so can't see it changing
Maybe you are correct
But she bolted pretty sharpish lol
Love moments like that though
extremely grateful as always
Many thanks
"Rough as a badgers arse" 🤣 oh God! I doubt that though. Those little moments are beautiful...regardless of the final outcome.
Loved this write my friend. Your description of this damsel is quite striking, and your reaction so self effacing that it makes the encounter a wonderfully incredible read. More's the pity she turned and walked away, many a romance has begun with such a simple word as "hi". Could be she's beautiful but a bit dense, maybe?
Thank you Bella
A wonderful summary of this write
Extremely grateful for your time to read and comment
I agree with Bella Shepard, so many relationships begin with "hi" or something like it. A shame she turned you down, you dazzle with words, my friend!
And your presence dazzles chrissy
Running out of ways to thank you
For the priceless support
Much obliged
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