Smooth talker

peto

As she tosses her hair 

Perfumed scent fills the air

She reveals just a little more skin 

Sparkling eyes hold my gaze 

Like a mouse in a maze 

This lost soul now quite fancies a win

When her mouth cracks a smile 

I just stand there a while 

overdosing on beauty so sweet 

Light reflects from her nails 

I doubt she ever fails 

To have men simply fall at her feet 

Though I've never been smooth 

Feel I must make my move 

But the best I come up with is hi

As she giggles and turns 

And my face really burns 

Her response to my best line is bye

Did I blow my big chance 

of a whirlwind romance 

Was this moment a cruel twist of fate

Guess I'll keep marching on

That's another chance gone 

Maybe "hl" needs some work for a date

  • Author: peto (Offline Offline)
  • Published: July 26th, 2023 01:04
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  • Caring dove

    A Good and engaging writing , peto 🙂 sometimes it’s difficult to make conversation of feeling shy or anxious ,

    I especially like the mention of a mouse in a maze and light reflecting from her nails

    A nicely written poem

    • peto

      Thank you very much Violet
      Your support and encouragement are inspiring
      Much obliged

    • Parisab

      Such an in-depth look at your muse with full commitment and vulnerability-pure sentiments never fail in poetry in my opinion

      • peto

        Or in comments
        Appreciate such a kind comment
        Many thanks

      • LIZ

        Very nice! Vulnerable! You don't have to be smooth...just be you. If hi is all you got...and it's meant to be, that will be enough!! Maybe the giggle means you left an impression, and deep down she's shy too?

        • peto

          Rough as a badgers arse over here LIZ
          Stood me in good stead so can't see it changing
          Maybe you are correct
          But she bolted pretty sharpish lol
          Love moments like that though
          extremely grateful as always
          Many thanks

          • LIZ

            "Rough as a badgers arse" 🤣 oh God! I doubt that though. Those little moments are beautiful...regardless of the final outcome.

          • Bella Shepard

            Loved this write my friend. Your description of this damsel is quite striking, and your reaction so self effacing that it makes the encounter a wonderfully incredible read. More's the pity she turned and walked away, many a romance has begun with such a simple word as "hi". Could be she's beautiful but a bit dense, maybe?

            • peto

              Thank you Bella
              A wonderful summary of this write
              Extremely grateful for your time to read and comment

            • Christina8

              I agree with Bella Shepard, so many relationships begin with "hi" or something like it. A shame she turned you down, you dazzle with words, my friend!

              • peto

                And your presence dazzles chrissy
                Running out of ways to thank you
                For the priceless support
                Much obliged



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