Your continuous absence
Is starting to show
The love that I have
I'm afraid you won't know
Those please come to bed eyes
You deliberately throw
Were never directed at me
Teasing all of my body
My soul and my mind
To the point when the doc says
Son stop or go blind
How cruel must it all get
For this one of a kind
To see sunrise announce a new day
Still that age old romantic
Who's under my skin
Hopes one day you'll return
With the demons within
Beaten into a pulp
As you finally begin
Getting real curtain down no more play
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Author:
peto (
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Oh Peto, your very last stanza brings this beautifully to a hopeful end. ❤️
Gotta try to keep something for the end
Thank you Teddy
Always enjoy seeing your views
Much appreciated
Ohhhhh this...."Still that age old romantic Who's under my skin, Hopes one day you'll return, With the demons within" ACCEPTANCE? Raw and real! I'm a hopeless romantic too! I'm currently writing a piece that resonates with this one! I love it!!! ❤️
Thank you LIZ
I'm sure you will write a belter
Look forward to reading it
Oh peto- I agree with everyone else, "Still that age old romantic
Who's under my skin
Hopes one day you'll return
With the demons within "
this is beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! And real, and so so so similar to exactly how I feel at the moment that I am almost considering calling this telepathy!
Hi Rilla
I knew you were going to say that
Many thanks my friend
'How cruel must it all get
For this one of a kind
To see sunrise announce a new day'
.. it seems the love that must come out of this is other worldly magical.. that must be why the one under your skin holds hope.. the soul never forgets or so it seems.
Thank you sage
I really enjoy your insight
"Other worldly magical "
Such a poetic response
Very much appreciated
The cadence in this right is flowing and smooth, while your words speak with vivid imagery, successfully providing the clarity and strong meaning of the piece. Beautiful work!
Thank you very much pop
Truly appreciate such a comment
Very kind and much appreciated
I hear Cole Porter's "I've got you under my skin", playing in the background as you maneuver your way through the tangled web of love, with the eternal hope of a silver lining at the end. This poem has it all in spades my friend!
I got you
Deep in the heart of me
Thank you very much Bella
You honour me with such a comparison
Truly grateful
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