They not only witnessed her destruction but were the ones to destroy her; then they sat and wondered why she saw nothing but darkness. The moon shone gloriously through her eyes and her smile still brightened a room. They forgot to look past it deep down to the cracks. They forgot that the stars shone their brightest when they were about to die. They watched her death with bewilderment and anger all because they failed to look beyond the surface.
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Author:
Niki Oz (Pseudonym) (
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Oh NIK
This is dynamite
The dying stars line is sensational
Read and re read trying to look deeper
Surrounded by the ignorant
Their actions fatal
Superb writing
Thank you so insanely much. I am so horribly insecure about posting things because what I write is truly what I feel so it's hard. Getting responses like this even once truly means the world.
It's not a judgement on your writing NIK
bit tit for tat on here
Like a pals act at times
I found if I I commented on a few
They would return the favour
You should try it
Your writing needs to be read
I appreciate the information and the compliments. I've been on here a long time but still not sure how it works so thank you!
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