Down in The Hold


Down in The Hold


The sponge

she wielded so well,

was full

of some other fools


long before she

had a chance to wipe

his brow

with it, both cool

and it wet ..

But it was the least

she could do

under such difficult

circumstances ..

Given the promises

he made

and those that she

had kept ..

It was just one of

so many

unfortunate things

we all guessed ..

But nevertheless,

it was both

noted and welcome ..

Yet despite that

single act of kindness

he died the very

next day ..

Somewhere down

in the hold

up to his neck in

the dead

and the wounded

and likewise those

dying ..

If you so wish

ma’am, you may yet

find him

stowed somewhere,

deep down in the hold ..

  • Author: Neville (Offline Offline)
  • Published: September 17th, 2023 03:22
  • Comment from author about the poem: much the same as a dog is not just for Christmas .. these words are not just for old sailors .. so heave ho' me hearty's
  • Category: Unclassified
  • Views: 17
  • Users favorite of this poem: Bella Shepard, L. B. Mek.


  • Dove

    Was he Black Beard the Pirate, for they slashed his head off and shot him silly. Just kidding. Great Tale thy weaves. Of kindness, and doom. My heart doth sigh!💗❤💓👍

    • Neville

      tis but make believe, a dreadful salty fairy-tale of days of yore .. filled with blood n gore .. so stay yon sighing heart dear lass or this old boy will cry .. ❤️🤍💛💜👍

    • Parisab

      Hemingwayesque in its quality and tone, and I mean it as a compliment-thanks as always for the treat

      • Neville

        even if you are kidding me dear P I would consider it a compliment .. thank you so bloomin much ,, Neville

      • Bella Shepard

        "a single act of kindness" is welcome at any stage, and if it gives some comfort, then perhaps some peace of mind. Beautifully written, your sailor's lament!

        • Neville

          much appreciated .. thank you Bella & truly .. Neville

        • L. B. Mek

          (I read and learn)

        • Neville

          I am near overcome with gratitude Mek thank you brother and then some .. Neville

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