Poem : 'And she fell asleep' ; 27 March, 2023.

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Poem : “And she fell asleep”

Soman Ragavan : Hello. Can I post a poem of mine for analysis, please ?

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Soman Ragavan : My poem : "And she fell asleep." This is about a little girl who fell ill. Please analyse by each stanza, then give overall comments. Mention similar poems from other authors, where possible. AND SHE FELL ASLEEP……..


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Thank you for sharing your poem "And she fell asleep." I will analyze it by stanza and provide my overall comments at the end.

Stanza 1: The first stanza sets the stage for the poem by introducing the subject of the little girl who is born and cherished by her family. The use of alliteration in "cherish'd even afore birth" and "long, ling'ring months of toil and endurance" adds a musical quality to the verse.

Stanza 2: In the second stanza, the little girl is described as a source of joy for her family, and her presence is likened to a bloom in the household. The stanza ends with the suggestion that her spring (youthful vitality) will be never-ending.

Stanza 3: The third stanza marks a shift in tone as the girl falls ill, and the disease begins to take hold of her. The use of personification in "Gnawing the being from within" creates a vivid image of the illness slowly consuming her.

Stanza 4: In the fourth stanza, the family is aware of the illness but remains hopeful that the little girl will recover. However, the stanza ends on a somber note, as the family receives some news that suggests the little girl's condition is deteriorating.

Stanza 5: The fifth stanza delivers the sad news that the little girl has passed away. The use of the metaphor "thunderbolt" adds to the sense of shock and tragedy. The stanza also mentions the family's prayers for her recovery.

Stanza 6: The sixth stanza contemplates the fleeting nature of life, with some people living for many seasons while others have only a brief moment. The stanza ends with the image of the little girl departing too soon, represented by the metaphor of departing after only a few springs.

Stanza 7: In the final stanza, the poem reflects on the little girl's memory and legacy. She is described as a pure angel to be remembered, and her story is to be recounted in unending stories and inscribed on the pedestal of lofty memories.

Overall, your poem is a touching tribute to the life of a little girl who passed away too soon. The use of metaphors and personification creates a vivid and emotive picture of the girl's life and death. The poem captures the family's love for her and the sadness they feel at her passing. The themes of the fleeting nature of life and the importance of memory and legacy are also well-articulated.

In terms of similar poems, "Annabel Lee" by Edgar Allan Poe and "The Little Black Boy" by William Blake also deal with the death of a child and the themes of loss and remembrance. Your poem shares some similarities with these works, but also has a unique voice and style.

Overall, I think you've done a great job with "And she fell asleep." Your poem is well-crafted, emotionally resonant, and has a strong message. Thank you for sharing it with me.
 
Soman Ragavan : Thank you. Goodbye for now.

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You're welcome, Soman! It was a pleasure analyzing your poem. If you have any further questions or would like additional feedback in the future, don't hesitate to reach out. Goodbye for now!

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                                                  POEM :
                                    AND SHE FELL ASLEEP

Cherish’d even afore birth, expect’d with care,
Long, ling’ring months of toil and endurance,
Ne’er failing to provide for her fare :
Finally born in all her resplendence.

Her captivating smiles, amazing the family,
Afford’d many a bliss and joviality;
A companion, a bloom to the dwelling,
Ne’er-ending was thought to be her spring.

Slowly crept in the malady,
Gnawing the being from within,
Setting the stage for tragedy,
Stealthily, hardly making any din.

Falt’ring steps, distant looks, vague misgivings,
Yet, hoping that all would work out well;
Alas, the furtive illness did swell :
Near’d slowly some dismal tidings…..

Broke ‘pon the family some thunderbolt :
Her frail body destiny pitilessly did jolt;
On recovery, fervent prayers were spent,
But, to the poor angel, little time was lent.

For some, season follows season,
For some, one season be the last;
The angel’s lot had been cast :
Yet, her brave smile did she don.

Some be not destin’d to smile at summer :
Too fast the mists of autumn had part’d :
Some live not to stomp in snowy winter :
In just a few springs, lov’d : and, depart’d.

After a little cradle, a little coffin :
Sleep, eternal sleep : a brief life :
Departing in silence : untouch’d tiffin :
Some solace : short had been the strife.

A pure angel to be remember’d,
Unique remembrances to be rever’d,
To be recount’d in unending stories,
Inscrib’d on the pedestal of lofty memories.
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Soman RAGAVAN
Mauritius (Indian Ocean)

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