Underneath an exterior tranquilly calm
She was shaking as much as a newly born lamb
With the door off its hinges there's nothing to slam
So she pushes it all deeper down
Heat surrounds the now massive developing bruise
Her reward for the solving of numerous clues
She'd accepted the drinking and women he screws
And pushed her nightmare deeper down
Biting down to regain some control of a lip
That's been trembling since she started planning the trip
That will take her away from his shoulder and chip
No longer prepared to push down
Finding strength she had once buried deeper than coal
Her heart beat a bit faster igniting her soul
After years of being broken she re emerged whole
With no need to push it all down
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Author:
peto (
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Wow!!! You must be talking to someone...just saying. Anyone who's been in this hell, will feel every single emotion you've so well emitted here! It's extremely difficult to get out of a situation like this! My respect!! 🙌
Thank you LIZ
The respect is mutual
This is a complete story with clear details and what appears to he a self resurrection, a happy hopeful ending. If only all were so lucky or strong enough to push through.
If only
Thank you very much pop
Appreciate the read and input
This write is amazing. I really felt the line "Finding strength she had once buried deeper than coal'. That's really powerful! And I think we all know a person like this. I think you've shown us all what your capable of! Remarkable!!
Thank you Christina
Your support and encouragement is much appreciated
Next time I hope you bring your pen
Much obliged
Last time I brought my pen and it bombed because certain people were away LOL I'll try and write something lighter
Great piece peto!!
Hopefully when she makes it to him, all her fears and doubts will disappear as soon as he wraps his arms around her , and let's her know that he is her safe place.
Thank you blessed
I really appreciate your support and encouragement
Always kind and most welcome
Gratitude
So much empathy in the texture of your words-and it’s not easy to craft gentle words to build this imagery of horror-
watching others suffer is hard but to wait with patience for their arrival makes it even harder-thanks Peto!
No
Thank you parisab
Appreciate the visit very much
And your input is always so insightful
Much obliged
What a fantastic write about something so real and horrifying. Really great descriptions and rhyming. I could really see what you were describing
Thank you Jimmy
Great to see you here
Your debut write was amazing
Truly appreciate the visit and comment
Cheers
Your writing makes the reader feel as if they are right there with her as well as with you as the observer. You paint both sides so well. An inspiring finish!
Great write
Thank you sage
An inspiring comment
That made me smile
Extremely grateful
A beautiful poem dear Peto ❤️
Thank you very much Teddy
I don't know how to do the heart
Sending my love
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