With all of her ducks neatly set in a row
Victoria's secret's beginning to show
Lingerie pics were sent to the one in the know
She was up for a sordid affair
Timothy heard her cry reaching out for her hand
Promising he would satisfy every demand
Falling head over heels he's in no rush to land
Soaking up all fun of the fair
Passion flows to the surface whenever they speak
Close enough to connect in a way that's unique
So the next guy will get the same spiel with a tweak
Femininity's mystical flair
She retreats to the safety of comfortable hell
Never able to show all the wonders she'd tell
Missing out on the touch on the taste on the smell
On the truth she regards as a dare
No one wins when the dark forces retake control
All he touched was the darkest recess of her soul
For a brief moment both halves had felt like one whole
Vic n tim circling in a square
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Excellent. you do a great job at creating intrigue. Nice use of rhyme.
Thank you Thomas
Apologies for late reply
OMG what an excellent play on words...I was wondering how "Vic N Tim' would work, splendid as Victoria's Secret and Timothy. Also, who is the victim in that mess? You sir, are a wordsmith, Stevie! I really enjoyed reading this!
Thanks Christina
So kind as always
Much appreciated
Great word play-some seek dare instead of truth and that is not meant to end well-at the same time there are some wardrobe mentions to lighten the mood of the poem-
Truly appreciate your time and input
Apologies for late reply
Extremely grateful
Mysterious and enticing.
Temptation is tricky.
The last line poses as if in a stand-off.. will she succumb to the darkness or not..
Clearly I'm over here on the edge of my seat. haha'
Don't be falling off sage
I really appreciate your support very much
Greatly appreciated
Makes me think of hidden love desires...where you just get a glimpse...even though you'd like to have it all...but there's too much pain involved. All fun and games...until reality hits! We can't truly grasp it, when we let darkness win!! Bravo!!!!!
Ah you really look into the write LIZ
Extremely grateful for your time and friendship
Great piece peto!!
I agree with all these,
Especially with Maxine,
It's sad , but intriguing and the two halves should be as one,
Communication is the only way that they can become whole , voicing their concerns and thoughts to one another!
If only Timothy wouldn't give up, because I'm sure she is reaching to him as well, recognizing him as her other half!
Blessed
I love the enthusiasm of your comment
And I am extremely grateful for them
Apologies for late reply
No worries my friend,
beautiful light and dark
she retreats to the safety of comfortable hell
amazing use of words
Sunshine
Thank you very much for looking back over this older write
I appreciate it
Cheers
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