Notice of absence from Hey-Madison
I probably have writer's block, or I'm getting an education, either way, check out more of my work on my profile.
I probably have writer's block, or I'm getting an education, either way, check out more of my work on my profile.
Take me home
You’re my home
I see you next to me
But I can’t seem to reach
Over, to you
I know you’re there
I know you see me
I feel your presence
One of someone
I once loved
When did I say “I love you?”
When never is forever
And the clock strikes nine
With you I guess
I cannot dine
The table at which you sit
With people I now love
An outcast among your closest friends
See how you made me feel?
But I still love you
Watch me break
When your eyes meet mine
Those blue eyes so deep indeed
I know they know me
I’ve waited to see them for years on end
The surface level person I see
Might feel those feelings for me
But my time is up
And I’m due soon
Text me now or call me at noon
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Author:
Maddie Judith (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: October 30th, 2023 14:49
- Comment from author about the poem: This poem is about a friend I left due to the toxic environment
- Category: Friendship
- Views: 5
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Comments2
Who are you talking to and why would I feel comfortable eaves-dropping.This needs names to engage the reader
Personally, I think this engages the reader by allowing them to ponder who this is about. It's not about feeling comfortable to eavesdrop, it's about how an important, life changing event affects a person and how you never really get over the missing feeling that you get when your first love (friend or partner) leaves you.
Brilliant. The theme is universal. And you put into words what others might not be able to do. Gritty and real. I love the honesty and transparency.
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