I’m working on this story
and this poem
and this painting…
but I have
a quandary
a dilemma.
How will I know
when its finished?
I dab a bit more paint
on the canvas,
hoping I haven’t ruined it.
I add a twist to my story,
that the killer is actually
the driver, not the hitcher,
if that makes sense?
Does the story end there?
Maybe I should add a police chase
and a shoot-out.
I write another line
of the poem
adding astounding alliteration
but does it work?
Is it finished?
I’m working on this story
and this poem
and this painting…
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Tom Dylan (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I just wondered that how we know when things are finished, when a story etc is finished and we\\\'re done. How do we know to stop and go on to the next project?
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I don’t think our art is ever finished. We continually look for ways to improve it. . A dab of paint here, a brush stroke there. I have poems, I still revise after 20 years. Have a happy Tuesday Tom.
Yes, that's exactly it. I was watching something on TV the other night, and this artist was painting away, dabbing here and there. I thought, how do they know when they're finished? How do any of us know? Maybe I'll come back to this poem and change it. 🙂 Happy Tuesday to you too, Cassie. Cheers, Tom.
“How will I know when its finished?” --- Grammar, Sir, Grammar! Stap me vitals Sir - Thems three Items ,Thus plural. Language is all wot we got ; gotter git it right , otherwise how do we know It’s right….?
Great stuff Tom – Carry on with your ambidextrous antics. 😊
Ah right, I do take your point, sir, but I was thinking of each thing individually.. I'm writing this story, I'm working on this poem,,, when will it be finished? Meaning each thing.. 🙂 Technically I agree but in my head I was thinking of each thing separately... my dad and I have a similar discussion over whether words are one word, two words or hyphenated. I always chuck it down as one word and my dad is a stickler for a hyphen! 🙂
Oh, I dunno. Some wag said 'A letter (or book, story, etc) should be long enough as to be able to reach the end of it'.
In a way that's a complete useless bit of information, as we may read a book to the end, whether it's 10 pages or 500+ pages!
I like that, Orchi, very good! Long enough to reach the end! 🙂
But what does it mean exactly?! lol. We might prefer to read a long book. heehee.
I heard of a writer sending a letter, just saying '?'
The reply letter he got was '!' Or maybe it was vice versa.
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