Walking

MendedFences27

Walking



     I hear you walking / there above me.

                 “                 / and you say you love me.

                 “                 / and it keeps me awake at night.

                 “                 / and so I write.

 

      I saw you walking / away from me.

                 “                 / saying you still love me.

                 “                 / and it keeps me awake at night.

                 “                 / and so I write.

 

I know you’ve walked / away with him.

                 “                 / and you said something grim.

                 “                 / and it keeps me awake at night.

                 “                 / and so I write.

  

   I feel you’ve walked / away for good.

                 “                 / and said our love’s no good.

                 “                 / and it keeps me awake at night.

                 “                 / and I can’t write.

     

     I hear you walking / back home to me.

       I see you walk in / to our bedroom.

   I know you love me / for you keep me awake at night.

          I feel your love / and that's why I write.

  • Author: MendedFences27 (Offline Offline)
  • Published: August 14th, 2024 11:10
  • Comment from author about the poem: Just working with "Form."
  • Category: Love
  • Views: 14
  • Users favorite of this poem: Teddy.15
Get a free collection of Classic Poetry ↓

✔ Receive the ebook in seconds ✔ 50 poems from 50 different authors


Comments +

Comments9

  • sorenbarrett

    A very different style and format to this poem. It fits well and reads nicely. Very nice

    • MendedFences27

      Thanks, SB. Different style and format, I was worried.

    • Neville


      You really are on form Phil .. & as far as I'm concerned, that's a good form ular you got there .. sorry couldn't resist .. but its true I tell ya ..

      • MendedFences27

        Thanks, Neville. Your comments are well spaced. Appreciate the humor and support.

      • Teddy.15

        Dear Phil your poem is walking and talking, about love, love is walking through this poem and the journey hasn't yet ended. A beautiful form and piece of poetry. 🌹

        • MendedFences27

          Thank you, Teddy. Love, the quintessential theme of poetry. It can and will walk up, down around, in, out, back and forth, and all over.

        • Thomas W Case

          Well crafted. Powerful work.

          • MendedFences27

            Thanks, TC. Always appreciated.

          • Cassie58

            Love and relationships can and do keep us awake at night, especially when the path isn’t a smooth one. Interesting format MendedFences. I enjoyed my visit.

            • MendedFences27

              Thanks, C58. Do they, ever. Smooth or otherwise.

            • MendedFences27

            • Tony36

              Great write

              • MendedFences27

                Thanks, Tony 36.

                • Tony36

                  You're welcome

                • Goldfinch60

                  May she have walked back to you forever Phil.

                  Andy

                  • MendedFences27

                    Thank you, Andy. 53 years and counting.

                  • Bella Shepard

                    Incredible form, love the way you bridge from stanza to stanza to tell this tale of love walking, quite moving.

                    • MendedFences27

                      Thanks, Bella. I appreciate your comments on the form. I did not want it to diminish the Love theme.



                    To be able to comment and rate this poem, you must be registered. Register here or if you are already registered, login here.