Notice of absence from Tristan Robert Lange
Will be not posting consistently for the next couple days as I set up my official web site and get some other important next steps in order. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
Will be not posting consistently for the next couple days as I set up my official web site and get some other important next steps in order. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
A little meltdown
I did just meet,
Would not set me down
Onto my feet.
I did just meet,
Would not set me down
Onto my feet.
It tossed me and turned
My smile around;
It stuck me, it burned,
It will resound.
My smile around;
It stuck me, it burned,
It will resound.
It twisted my brain
And knocked me up;
It drove me insane
And did erupt
And knocked me up;
It drove me insane
And did erupt
Into phantasm.
The swirling sign—
Broke through in darkness—
Shades what was mine.
The swirling sign—
Broke through in darkness—
Shades what was mine.
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Author:
Tristan Robert Lange (
Online) - Published: August 23rd, 2024 16:52
- Comment from author about the poem: I am currently working on a major poetic work, an epic horror narrative poem with intricate meter and rhyme scheme, and this process has been both challenging and rewarding. This little poem here captures a bit of a metldown I had during one of my writing sessions. #ItHappens
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Comments5
It does reflect the issue of melt down well. Very nice
Thank you! Glad thought it worked and enjoyed it.
Slightly more than a dissociative spell then?
I must say your write plus picture left me feeling slightly…Vague memories of similar many moons ago.
Hahaha! Slightly. Thanks for reading and commenting.
A fine write T. Erm, I'm not exactly writing a major epic, but shall carry on poet-ing!
Oh…please do! Thank you so much for reading and commenting! Much appreciated.
a most impressive write Tristan.
thoroughly enjoyed the read.
Thank you, kind sir, both for reading and for commenting. Glad it resonated!
I can surely relate to this one. Well described in its brevity. Elizabeth
Thank you, Elizabeth! It's good to not be alone, especially in a meltdown! Glad the piece was relatable and that it delivered. And, I'll have you know, I did just recently complete the first draft of the poem that caused all the emotions to flood. It's 14 pages long! LOL! Not even sure what I am doing with it yet, but yeah! Anywho, thank you for your support and for journeying back in time to read my poems.Very appreciated! 🖤♰🦇🪞🩸🕯️
Wow Tristan, that is AMAZING! 14 Pages long! No wonder your poor brain had a meltdown. (I must confess to having a meltdown over making a cup of coffee and writing one line let alone 14 pages!) lol 😂
You are definitely not alone my friend and you have my unconditional support and solidarity.
Such ambition, you deserve a congratulations for completing such a piece- sounds like an epic opus . You know you can always share it and I’d be happy to review it - more than happy to but I understand if you want to keep it close to your chest, works like this are such a labour of meltdowns and love. I’ll “friend” you if you like and send you my email.
I’m in the middle of reviewing an entire book for a friend so a 14 word poem from someone as accomplished as yourself would be an honour and a delight.
The offer is there and always open and extended toward you!
I wonder if you entered the work into chat gpt and asked “ What international poetry publications, journals and magazines would best suit this piece for consideration for publication?” if that would be of any assistance in narrowing it down to a tailored field where the gatekeepers are tailored toward your needs as opposed to the other way around????
As you said if they won’t let us in through the doors, we should at least try the windows ! Here for moral and support. Congratulations on finishing such an epic piece of form and thought! Elizabeth
Yeah. It took quite a bit from me to write it. Started it last August and just finished the first draft. The ChatGPT idea is a good one too. Thanks for that. I'd be glad to send it your way to have you read it and I am very thankful for your willingness to. That is so very nice of you and I truly appreciate the support. Thanks again for reading about my "little" meltdown.
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