Here I
Sit in my own
Cozy, warm, little den
Listening to some holiday
Jazz tunes.
I am
Stuck in a state
Of eternal sadness
Brought on by feelings of self-doubt.
Haunted.
I paint
My whole abode
In shades of ebony;
A shroud of raven claws blankets
My heart.
I’m told
That all wounds heal
In time; Yet, I feel that
I’m lost even as I strive to
Echo
All the
Things I’ve been taught
About life’s happiness;
To obey such folly won’t
Find joy.
Here I,
Stuck in a state—
In shades of ebony—
I’m lost even as I strive to
Find joy.
© 2024 Tristan Robert Lange. All rights reserved.
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Author:
Tristan Robert Lange (
Online) - Published: December 3rd, 2024 09:07
- Comment from author about the poem: Form: Cinquain Garland. This poem is in response to Sparkle City Magic’s Mystical Adventure ~ Week #10 prompts (Medium.com). The prompts used: cozy, sadness, paint, echo, happiness, and obey.
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Comments6
Sometimes we can’t find happiness even if we want to feel that way . Sounds like the state of mind and environment isn’t helping. I guess we can be stuck with how we feel ,sometimes
Thank you, my friend! Indeed, sometimes we certainly can be. Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to thoughtfully respond! I always appreciate it! ❤️🙏
Good write T.
Thank you my friend! 🙏❤️
A read on the darker side it seems to have a feel of Gothic to it. That’s OK though I like cloudy days from time to time. Written with great imagery and a sense of pathos.
Yeah...def a poem true to my form! 😂 Though I haven't ever done a cinquain gariand before, speaking of forms. But it definitely has a Gothic feel to it. I am glad that, despite the clouds, you found it likable! Thank you so much for your time and your thoughtful feedback! I always appreciate it, my friend! ❤️🙏
Well written, takes you on a little journey a lot of people have travelled, enjoyed the read.
Thank you so much Tobani! I really am glad the poem resonated and that you enjoyed it, my friend! Many thanks! 🙏❤️
You are very welcome
Oh, I can so relate to these emotions. Really well expressed and without any pretence or complications. Well played on the form too!
Thank you so much my friend! I am very happy the poem resonated...though I we both know how unhappy these emotions are. At least we are not alone in those feelings and for that I am grateful! Thank you again for the read and the thoughtful comment. Glad the form delivered too! It was a fun challenge. ❤️🙏
How extraordinarily noir .. and likewise enjoyed .. Neville
Why thank you my friend! I always appreciate your time and your feedback! Much appreciated, my friend! ❤️🙏
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