new message arrives
sound of an xmas chime
blue light
shining announcement
merry xmas bro
ho ho ho ๐
๐ u on new yrs?
I put my smart phone down below,
Underneath my woke, tingling legs,
So that we can finish op’ning
Last presents which laid there like dregs.
The last one in particular
Struck me as something really odd.
It was a larger kind of thing
With a rectangular shaped bod.
vibration and chimes
tingle through
curiosity kills the cat
happy holidays dude
u get dat ๐ฎ
w8 till u ๐ what I got
It was not any smart device,
Rather, it was a lonesome book,
Nothing I hadn’t seen before,
But for some reason my heart shook.
This book, it did not tell a tale.
It was not that sort of fine read.
The volume was made up of words
That caused my inner soul to bleed.
These words—not ones I like to use—
On the page like the ink of truth,
Leave me hoping I can forget
The reality they do sooth.
ding-a-ling-a-ling
another text
happy holidays to you and yours
see you tomorrow
still ๐ to work together? - Bob
ding-a-ling-a-ling
PS - My wife got me a new ๐ฑ
This book has a real heavy feel,
A tome of clay bricks in my lap
Filled with all these rejected words
So that we can avoid a trap.
Yet, the more I look, I can see
That this book was given this day
To me, yours truly, as a gift
To read and not to throw away.
But this was not an easy read,
The words hit me like piercing spears
Thrown at me with strong velocity
Causing me to bleed out my fears.
ding-a-ling-a-ling
Ugh! Shut that off.
Now I can read without those rings
Disrupting me from the lexemes,
For right now this book really hurts
And I need not those silly memes.
No, I need not those stupid memes
For, I find this book really hurts
Filled to the brim with tough lexemes
That dredge up strange and haunting themes
And where the hard truth ever spurts—
No, I need not these stupid memes.
These words are familiar like dreams.
The word “lonely” in this book blurts—
It’s so brim-filled with tough lexemes.
“Alone”, yes and “haunted” so screams.
“Loss”, “grief”, and “rejected”—my mind flirts—
No, I need not these stupid memes.
A book of wordy nightmare dreams,
The locution lexicon squirts
Out these really painful lexemes—
They may not fit our Christmas themes
Because they are attached to hurts—
Still, I need not these stupid memes,
But this book filled with tough lexemes.
© 2024 Tristan Robert Lange. All rights reserved.
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- Comment from author about the poem: Form: This poem combines text message format, quatrains in tetrameter with an ABCB rhyme scheme, and concludes with a villanelle.
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Just like its dynamic structure, this poem captures the tension between the surface-level joy of the holidays and the deeper, often unspoken emotions that linger beneath. It's a powerful reminder that it's okay to acknowledge and explore these feelings, even during times that are supposed to be filled with happiness and celebration. We really canโt focus on some things and deny or suppress the rest. A robust work here!
Thank you my friend! Indeed! That is the heart of this poem. Your time and feedback are very much appreciated! โค๏ธ๐
I like this because it shows that not everyone is bouncing around with joy at Christmas, and you are allowed to feel that way. A well put together piece of work, Enjoyed
Thank you Tobani! And yes, ๐ฏ I very much appreciate your time and your thoughts, my friend! ๐น๐
You are very welcome
Outside of the form which is wonderful its message is great as well. One might take several roads in interpreting it outside of its literal message but I chose to think of how we receive gifts others give. What may seem plain or useless to us may be a valuable gift if we only use it. To do so we must be open to seeing it for what it is not what we through our eyes think it to be.
Ooh! Yes! Indeed! Thank you so much for looking at this poem from outside the proverbial box. A wonderful interpretation, my dear friend! Much appreciated! โค๏ธ๐
Dang it! Can people use 2 seconds worth of ink to write 'Christmas' instead of 'Xmas'? But one said: 'But I got 5 million cards to write; I will save 10 million seconds by writing 'Xmas'. lol.
๐คฃ Donโt mess with X, said a little birdie that went tweet! ๐ Okayโฆbad Twitter dad joke. Anyway, regarding the โxโ in Xmas, one need to simply open their Greek dictionary/concordance to the word Christ (ฯฯฮนฯฯฯฯ) and theyโll quite clearly see that the X is very much the first letter. Christians have been using that X for a very long time! ๐ Seeโฆcontroversy over! ๐ Jokes and Christmas expressions aside, thank you for reading and engaging Orchi! Always appreciated, my friend! ๐โค๏ธ
Isn't that Greek X equal to 'Ch' in English? I think some Greek letters are the same in English, but some are not. I see it as the whole word spelling 'Christos'. How you get those Greek letters? I can't even get an accent on an 'e'? lol.
the emotions while reading this โ โ โ โ The text format is not my favorite, so I went from being annoyed to engaged so quickly! ๐ XD
Hahaha! Yes and, I am sure you noticed, the text format is intentionally in there TO disrupt and annoy! LOL! So, I am glad that succeeded enough without totally derailing you from experiencing the more traditional parts of the poem! Thank you so much for reading and for sharing your experience! Much appreciated, my friend! ๐โค๏ธ
I was tempted to throw my laptop out the window, I'll say. but because you're a good writer I convinced myself to keep reading lol
A deep and touching and
captivating poem,
love the forms and
text's and repeated line,
'I need not these stupid memes'.
Another home run with
bases loaded!! ๐ฅ
My pleasure to read indeed!
Best regards โ๏ธ Thad
Thank you Thad! Your visits and feedback always make my day and I know you love your forms, my friend...so I was looking forward to what you thought. I am glad the poem delivered and that you enjoyed. ๐โค๏ธ
Dear Tristan kudos on your message, Christmas is a joy if you have all you need to make it so, a different show for those who have nothing or very little. All the light and all the darkness shows in here. Brilliant. ๐น
You are welcome dearest Teddy! I am truly glad that it resonated and delivered! Your time and thoughts are very much appreciated! ๐โค๏ธ
This work of art has more layers than a string of onions .. & depending on which way it is viewed is deeper than the Mariana Trench .. The way you have strung it together is very clever too .. dipping & diving rather than merely bobbing up n down with some kind of undercurrent or surface flow .. and talk about being of the moment, or timely .. well it don't need three wise men to see where you are coming from .. But hey, hang on, there we go again .. maybe we do ๐ง..๐ง..๐ง.. Although emoticons and emojis are thought to be a 21st century thing, they have been around since forever .. often added for fun or to codify messages when used .. Here they add a seasonal dimension and added uniqueality (that's my own neologism) to make the reader dubble check the messages his or her own brain have arrived at .. a bit like a - or a pause or gap .. The rhyme structure & additional poetic forms are the icing on the Christmas cake .. which serve to reinforce my pre-existing belief that you are a far braver man than me .. ๐๐น๐๐งโ๐๐
Oh wow! Thank you so much for your time, both in reading and in analyzing! Was not thinking about the use emoticons and emojis prior to tech, but you are right! Heck, the first attempts at written language were emoticons and emojis as I see it, granted those took up an entire cave wall (my God I cannot get the cave critic from Mel Brooksโ History of the World part I out of my head ๐). Anywho, thank you my friend for the deep analysis and support. ๐โค๏ธ It keeps the โbraveryโ manifesting ๐คฃ That muse has been really pushy as of late! ๐
Wow! Excellent write. The picture you added was perfect.. As I read this, I picture the man on Xmas night really concentrating on the wordsw of this book though it is full of pain. Beautiful!
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