I just woke up in a black and white dream,
Where all that is good has been made a fright—
Where the good get their wish to not be born—
I am alert in this black and white dream.
Thus, I mutely scream through a soundless void,
And nobody can hear that I am here
As I vainly scream through this soundless void.
I am alone in this black and white dream,
Alone while around familiar people—
Thus, I hoarsely yell through a shapeless void,
And nobody knows me, though I am here.
I am so scared in this black and white dream,
Where the good feel the harm in being born.
I am here around familiar people—
But they’ve all become twisted and ugly,
Thus, I blankly stare through a gaping void,
And nobody cares that I’m even here.
I’m imprisoned in a black and white dream,
Where the good eat their wish to not be born—
Stuck unknown around familiar people—
In a corrupt world where rich moguls reign
And people all become twisted ugly,
We desp’rately stare through a lonely void
Where nobody knows us or wants us here.
The good, out of luck on not being born—
Stuck unknown around familiar people—
Are dying here in a black and white dream,
Embodied by a tangerine horror
Deceiving a world where rich moguls reign.
We no longer scream through the hopeless void
Where nobody knows us or wants us here.
The good have slowed, long ago, being born
Into hell around familiar people—
Longing to live in a black and white dream,
Where all that was good has been made a fright.
© 2024 Tristan Robert Lange. All rights reserved.
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- Comment from author about the poem: Form: Revelatory Cascade; Meter: Pentameter. This poem takes its inspiration from Frank Capra’s “It’s A Wonderful Life”, reimagined as a commentary on contemporary American society and politics. This is just the second poem to have ever been written in this new form. I chose to write it on a different subject matter than the first to show its versatility.
- Category: Sociopolitical
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Sounds like a good place to live? (eh?) lol.
Oh! It’s a thrill! Filled with a “thrifty working class” no doubt! 🤣 Thanks for reading and commenting my friend! 🙏❤️
It sounds like a very accurate description of the world we already live in, i really enjoyed the read, thank you
It sure does, sadly. I was watching It's A Wonderful Life last night and I thought "wow...if they thought Pottersville was looming in 1946...they should see us now!" As for my own country, we've damn-well elected Henry Potter for effing president! 😬 (2x now) Ha! I will take the British Harry Potter any day of the week over the older, American iteration LOL! Thank you so much for your astute feedback and for your time in reading. Always appreciated my friend! 🙏❤️
You are very welcome
Some would like us to believe that we live in a black and white world where there is only wrong and right, good and bad, sane and insane but no we are trapped in a world of color, shades and hues. A nightmare in black and white becomes a dream of serenity in color but also one of confusion with half rights and wrongs. A thought provoking write and I have to admit my knowledge of poetic form is quite limited to sonnets, limericks different rhyme schemes and free verse.
🤣 No problem, dear Soren. To be fair, very few in the world will have ever heard of this form before because I created it (on Christmas Day 2024, to be exact) and this is only the second poem to ever be written in it (to my knowledge anyway). So, that makes you, my friend one of those few who know it, and one form richer than a majority of the rest of the world! LOL! Anyway, Thank you so much, dearest Soren, for your time and astute observation. Indeed, the world is not B&W no matter how much some try to make it so! You are also very right about the confusion too! Very much a reality! Again, I always appreciate your time and interpretation! 🙏❤️
One of my favourite themes are dreams, you make it look so easy, I see music so much music within this dear Tristan, these two lines stand out to me
Where the good get their wish to not be born
Wow a wonderful piece my friend. 🌹
Thank you so much dearest Teddy for your time and feedback, which I truly value. I am so glad that the musicality of this form, and my writing within its parameters, has come through again. Thank you also for sharing what lines stood out to you as well. I am so very happy to see that a) I was able to work with in the form a second time, and that b) I did so successfully!. Whew! 😅 I really appreciate your support, my dear friend! 🌹🙏🤗
Excellent write
Thank you so much Tony! 🙏❤️
You're welcome
WOW! Powerful penning,
really captures the
readers attention I'd say!!
That form really rocks in
versatility, you're right, either way!!
Thanks for sharing my friend!!
Best regards Peace Thad
And versatile it is, I’m still treading and diving deeper. A true challenge worth the expedition.
Having been born color blind I pretty much live in a black and white world. Thank you for this.
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