I had a dream
That I walked along
The surface of the water
And sang a song
The mist in my eyes
Began to fade
In the shallow depths
I wanted to wade
But I heard danger scream
So loud, so frightening
The moment the dream
Turned into a nightmare
Rushing back to shore
My feet froze like ice
I couldn’t move anymore
I was trapped in the sea
A terrible wave of heart cold fear
Blanketed my head as I drowned
In an ocean so blue and clear
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It was interesting to read. What particularly struck me was how the story ended without the main character doing anything wrong.
I feel that people can be in this situation a lot where they feel they don’t get what they really deserve. Thank you!
I get the sense of some one feeling overwhelmed, fighting to make there mark in the world. Very well written
Thank you very much
You are very welcome
An overwhelming dream to have. A change from being in the shallows to being engulfed by the power of the sea. A most frightening situation. The sea can be calm as calm and change into a monster so easily. Good poem.
I like thinking that the sea represents life which can change very quickly. Thank you.
That drew me in and was drowned along with the poetic persona! Marvellous 🙏🏻👍🏻🕊Liked and Faved!
Thank you very much!
You're welcome 🙏🏻👍🏻
I once read that water can be seen as a metaphor for our psychological condition. I’m sure you know who walked on water and thereby demonstrated their psychological mastery!
Thank you, it's cool how water can show the mental state. Yeah Jesus did overcome water or something.
BRAVO
Thank you!
You're welcome
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