I try to remember when I was twenty-five,
It was during a time when I felt more alive.
Truthfully, back then, I would have set out to strive
To simply succeed in life and avoid the dive.
Meaning, I would do anything to build our hive
To watch it expand and even more than survive.
But as the years went on that life didn’t arrive—
Well, it did in part, but saying more would contrive—
I can’t understand why anyone would deprive
The water and nutrients needed to revive
A past future hope that now sits in the archive.
This is a mystery of which I can’t derive.
So, here we sit, my love, at our own twenty-five,
The years passing away—lost—while we are alive.
It’s in moments like this I think to take a drive
Out to the sea of something—never to arrive.
© 2025 Tristan Robert Lange. All rights reserved.
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Tristan Robert Lange (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Form: Monorhyme. Meter: Modified Alexandrine.
- Category: Love
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Musings of the past? The what ifs in life and the what is. To find a word that one as enough options for rhyme on to finish each line with the same is difficult at best and I have tried some in the past myself. Nicely done
Yes. Musings of the past while sitting in the present. Indeed. I didn't even initially plan to do a monorhyme, but then it hit me to do it and, I am not going to lie, it posed a rewarding challenge. Thank you so much, my firiend. Your support is very much appreciated, always. 🙏❤️
Good write T.
Thank you Orchi! Much appreciated, my friend! ❤️🙏
Now me next poem with un-original title - twenty six! lol.
Brilliant work, great rhyme.
Thank you Thomas, much appreciated my friend! ❤️🙏
The dreams we could never accomplish when we were younger, I like the theme on searching for meaning. I love this poem!
Thank you so much, both for reading and for your analysis and thoughts. I am so glad that the poem resonated, my friend. ❤️🙏
You're very welcome!
The things we did not understand or achieve in our younger days, and how we even as we enter older years still be looking to understand that. Enjoyed the read
Indeed. Perhaps never will. Thank you so much, Tobani. I always appreciate your thoughtful feedback, my friend. I am glad the poem delivered! ❤️🙏
You are very welcome
You’ve done the monorhyme justice! And definitely took ownership of Alexandrine 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻
Thank you sir! Glad it delivered in both ways! Your feedback is always appreciated! ❤️🙏
If only I knew then what I....! How I have wished to go back somedays and start again. Then I remembered a priest saying how about this deal? You can go back, but on one condition. You have to live the exact same life again. I think I'd lose my mind!
Now I feel a rhyme coming on. Great write, Tristan.
Hahaha! Yeah, if that were the condition, I'd say, "Father forgive me, but hell no!" I'd loose my mind too! I think I may already have the first go-round! 🤣 Thank you so much Mutley. I appreciate your time and thoughts. Much appreciated, my friend. I am glad the poem delivered! 🙏❤️
Clapping! 👏👏
A fantabulous poem
and Monorhyme
I must say!! 💯👌
Brilliantly composed
In every way! 🙏
Thanks for sharing
really made my day!! 😊
Best regards ✌️ peace Thad
Why, I thank you— 🙏
I really do— 😎
You know it's true 💯
No longer blue 😊
Again, thank you! 🤗
Rock on my bro! 🤘😎 Tristan
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