the shame i carry
feels so heavy
the power you still hold
all against me still
its not fair
the shame
it shouldnt be mine
it should be yours
the power
it should be mine
it shouldnt be yours
so ill take it back
no matter how long it takes
it will be mine.
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Author:
NinjaGirl (
Online) - Published: January 9th, 2025 21:43
- Comment from author about the poem: not very revised
- Category: Unclassified
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Comments2
Raw sometimes is better than revised, my dear friend. Right now it's what it needs to be and, if ever you choose, you can rework or write a follow up. I've at least found that approach to be liberating. I could feel every bit of pain and hurt in your words. They come across very deeply and, for this poem, that is key. Well done NinjaGirl! ❤️
thank you Tristan! I don't usually revise my poems, they're usually a jumble of words on paper a bit like this one haha
Poems can be liberating to the author and at their most powerful state liberating to others as well. I hear the determination in this poem and feel the drive
thank you for reading!
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