Notice of absence from Tristan Robert Lange
💀 What do you know? I'm taking a holiday. You can bet that I will be back one day! See you in a week or so. In the meantime, have a look around! 💀
💀 What do you know? I'm taking a holiday. You can bet that I will be back one day! See you in a week or so. In the meantime, have a look around! 💀
The satin sheets feel so damn good
On this, our sacred bed of love.
Your body warms mine this cold night,
The satin sheets feel so damn smooth
Wrapped around us in such delight.
Steam and sweat saturate the sheets.
Your body holds mine this dark night—
Those satin sheets feel so damn sleek,
On our hot and sensitive flesh.
Wrapped right on around this night,
Steamy sweat saturates the sheets—
Those satin sheets, still so damn sleek—
My body is found this dark night
As aroused and sensitive flesh.
I wish I weren’t so alone.
Still wrapped around on this cold night,
Steamy sweat saturates the sheets—
Satin sheets, now feeling less sleek—
My body is stuck, this dark night,
As aroused and sensual flesh.
I hate these nights I dream of you;
I wish I weren’t so hopeless,
Wrapped around faded memories.
Steam and sweat have turned cold—
My body is desp’rate this night
And aroused as sexual flesh.
The satin sheets now feel like shit.
You lie near me, yet I’m alone.
I hate these nights I dream of you;
Wrapped around faded memories,
Steam and sweat have turned cold—
My body, desperate this night,
Is now let down as hopeless flesh.
The satin sheets feel so lonely
On this, our bed of distant love.
© 2025 Tristan Robert Lange. All rights reserved.
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Tristan Robert Lange (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Form: Revelatory Cascade. Meter: Tetrameter. This is the sixth (though published after the seventh) poem in my original Revelatory Cascade form and further shows its versatility.
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Whilst it is imminently possible to beat an egg & a few other things besides .. it is clearly impossible to beat a Revelatory Cascade Tetrameter .. A seemingly seamless example of the principle showing the unity of opposites in poetic form .. By Jove I think you not only got it, but you just went and done it too .. Life is such a bloomin predicament innit .. in spite of this form being new to me I suspect this example is crafted to perfection and is very impressive .. Neville
Why thank you, Neville! Indeed, this form is new to just about everyone. I created it on Christmas Day, and have been playing with it, trying to see how it works with different themes and meters. Glad that the poem and form delivered, my friend. For the good of the order, and because caring is sharing, here's the form in case you or anyone else wants a go at it.
Revelatory Cascade Form
created on Wednesday, December 25, 2024 by Tristan Robert Lange
A 35-line poetic form
Structure:
• 7 stanzas with expanding line counts: 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8 lines
• A total of 35 lines
Repetition: Pattern
• There are 8 repeating lines (L1 through L8) that form the core structure of the poem.
• L9 is unique and appears only once in the final stanza.
• The repetition follows this specific pattern throughout the expanding stanzas:
Stanza 1 (2 lines): L1, L2
Stanza 2 (3 lines): L3, L1, L4
Stanza 3 (4 lines): L5, L3, L1, L6
Stanza 4 (5 lines): L4, L5, L1, L3, L6
Stanza 5 (6 lines): L7, L4, L5, L1, L3, L6
Stanza 6 (7 lines): L8, L7, L4, L5, L3, L6, L1
Stanza 7 (8 lines): L9, L8, L4, L5, L3, L6, L1, L2
Key elements:
• L1 appears in every stanza.
• L2 only appears in the first and last stanzas.
• L7 is introduced in Stanza 5 as the Revelatory Spark or turning point and is not repeated in the concluding stanza.
• L9 is unique to the final stanza and does not repeat.
• Each repetition should be modified slightly to show progression or change.
This structure is essential to the Revelatory Cascade form, creating a complex interweaving of repeated lines that supports the gradual revelation central to the form.
My word, you are a credit to our species sir .. Neville
A very enjoyable read, i think i understood the authors comments!!, Those sheets have been through the wringer !!, Enjoy the rest of your day
They indeed have! Thank you, my friend! Glad that it delivered and you enjoyed it. Much appreciated! 🙏❤️
You are very welcome
What seems reality is a dream what seems the present only memories of the past. Pleasure becomes pain in this poem of hauting thoughts. Very well expressed.
Indeed. Thank you, Soren, for your time and astute feedback. Much appreciated, my friend! 🙏❤️
Some good more revelatory-wotsits! lol. I'm caught up with catching any pesky extra syllables that creep into my poem formats. lol. I can't truly call it 'metre' as that involves stressed and unstressed syllables. I would become too stressed over it. lol. And them imabic thingies too - pentameters.
Yes, some more revelatory-wotsits! Those metres can be quite the tricky little buggars, no doubt! And, trust me, I have caught plenty of extra syllables in mine too! 💩 happens, as it were! LOL! Thank you so much, Orchi, for your time and engagement. Much appreciated, my friend!
If I/we call it 'format' and not 'metre' I/we can forget about stress on certain syllables.
🤣 Fair enough. Well, the meter itself is less about the stress and more about the syllabic count itself. It's when you cross over into imabs or trochees that the stressed/unstressed becomes important, and much more difficult. Thanks again, Orchi. Always appreciated, my friend! ❤️🙏
Ooh, I've not seen many trochees about. Are they dangerous, as a wild animal? If we see one, should we approach it?! lol. Me being ignorant of poetic things.
Beware the damn Trochee, tougher than a Wookie my friend, and you know the saying, "Let the Wookie win". 🤣
Trochee sounds like some Scottish Highlands Yeti or something! lol. Meanwhile, I'm glad some are having slap and tickle (heehee) in this poem. Those pesky Trochees distracted me.
Indeed. I've been to the Highlands! I concur. Me too, it's been a refreshingly fun distraction way from those icky satin sheets! LOL!
I saw comedy show with a bed having black satin sheets. A reply was 'Black shiny dustbin bags!' lol.
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Excellent write Tristan
Thank you so much, Tony! Much appreciated, my friend! ❤️🙏
You're welcome
A really emotional,
poignant and powerful
poem of unrequited love!
So eloquently penned,
Love this form, 😍!!
Great job my friend!! 👍
Best regards ✌️ Thad
Thank you, my friend! I am glad you are loving the form! I am too, but I am a little biased! 🤣 Your time and feedback are much appreciated, Thad!
Seems to call for a change of sheets, one for each mood and situation. Perhaps, imo. 🙏🏻👍🏻🕊
🤣 Definitely a change of sheets, at the very least! Thank you, my friend. You time and thoughts are much appreciated! ❤️🙏
Yeah, right stimulus for corresponding emotion/need. 😊👍🏻🕊
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