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I am angry
I am wrong
I want to kill
I want to die
But why?
What is wrong with me?
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To many big capitals.
Full of passion and zest perhaps 🙏🏻🕊
Thank you!
Welcome 🙏🏻🕊
Truly if that is how you are feeling, finding someone close to open up to, would be a starting point, angry is fine, wanting to kill suggests help is needed, take care
Thanks
Take care
I love the format of this poem. As I see it, the way this poem is structured, it almost presents two poems in one. For example, one poem:
I am angry
I want to kill
But why?
the second poem
I am wrong
I want to die
What is wrong with me?
When read separately, then together, it presents an inner dialog happening within someone. Anger is such powerful emotion that it can cause us to experience all sorts of feelings, including that of killing. All people experience these emotions. Thankfully, few ever carry them out. Of course, that is where I see the other part of the poem coming in, because it recognizes the inherent wrong with wanting to kill someone, which then causes one to feel remorse or the thought and exasperation at their situation. That internalizes to not wanting to live anymore. The thought of killing another turns to thoughts of suicide and the existential question that one going through such turmoil would ask, "What is wrong with me?". The good news for us poets is that our craft allows us to get such stuff out constructively and positively. Some may not see this poem as positive, but if it 1) helps the poet get that kind of stuff out of them constructively in a healing way and 2) allows others to feel connected when feeling such things, then this is as positive of a poem as can be. Thank you for sharing this, and being willing to make yourself vulnerable. It is a wonderful poetic expression my friend. An easy fave for me.
Thank you so very much for your comment, means a lot to me. Such a good interpretation you have, I felt everything you said. I'm glad I wrote it, because I do think it helps me heal. Thanks again for your kind words! Have a great day.
Yes, I know it helps me heal. I have often quipped that if someone were to get into my poetry books without actually knowing me 😬, who knows what they would think? That said, who cares? 🤣 They'll think it regardless. Anywho, this was a powerful poem and I really dug the way you structured it. I hope you have a great day too!
It's normal to feel this way... but it feels so wrong. I love the big text versus the little text.
Thank you very much!
Great write
Thank you
You're welcome
It is fine to be angry, but it is not fine to be so angry you want to kill. I agree with Tobani, I would suggest you talk to someone about your emotions. Just talking can help. Please look after yourself.
Thanks
Sometimes emotions can be scary things.
Agreed, thanks for comment
Bro we are on the same boat..
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