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Ace Bunting

drowning is one of the worst ways to go

feeling it in your lungs

feeling it crush you

i wouldn’t go that deep

 

i’m watching you drown

watching you sink too deep

knowing that i sink in the same direction

like an anchor

i need you to pull me down with you

 

but i wouldn’t let it get that bad

stop before i lose sunlight

resurface in time to go down again

the captain stays in control

but he goes down with the ship

 

a massive ship. immense,

colossal, getting smaller as it sinks

almost small enough

little bit further, that little bit more

until you lose light. left aphotic

 

everyone else noticed it getting darker

they warned you, the pressure would get too much

but it was too beautiful

sinking deeper and deeper, seeing it change

almost small enough

 

that crushing feeling turned comforting

home is in the darkness, resurfacing now would be wrong.

awful. the brightness would burn.

you reached here before me

and they pulled you back out.

 

i saw you change

i remembered how you looked in the deep

i wouldn’t let it get that bad.

but i can’t stop now, not yet.

  • Author: Ace Bunting (Offline Offline)
  • Published: February 13th, 2025 17:57
  • Comment from author about the poem: Hi! I wrote this poem a few months ago and honestly i’m just looking for feedback on whether it’s actually any good or if it just comes across as the ultimate teenage edgelord. Feel free to ask questions, I hope the meaning is clear enough? I’d love any sort of advice or comments from anyone a bit more used to writing creatively like this. Thank you!
  • Category: Reflection
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