drowning is one of the worst ways to go
feeling it in your lungs
feeling it crush you
i wouldn’t go that deep
i’m watching you drown
watching you sink too deep
knowing that i sink in the same direction
like an anchor
i need you to pull me down with you
but i wouldn’t let it get that bad
stop before i lose sunlight
resurface in time to go down again
the captain stays in control
but he goes down with the ship
a massive ship. immense,
colossal, getting smaller as it sinks
almost small enough
little bit further, that little bit more
until you lose light. left aphotic
everyone else noticed it getting darker
they warned you, the pressure would get too much
but it was too beautiful
sinking deeper and deeper, seeing it change
almost small enough
that crushing feeling turned comforting
home is in the darkness, resurfacing now would be wrong.
awful. the brightness would burn.
you reached here before me
and they pulled you back out.
i saw you change
i remembered how you looked in the deep
i wouldn’t let it get that bad.
but i can’t stop now, not yet.
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Author:
Ace Bunting (
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- Published: February 13th, 2025 17:57
- Comment from author about the poem: Hi! I wrote this poem a few months ago and honestly i’m just looking for feedback on whether it’s actually any good or if it just comes across as the ultimate teenage edgelord. Feel free to ask questions, I hope the meaning is clear enough? I’d love any sort of advice or comments from anyone a bit more used to writing creatively like this. Thank you!
- Category: Reflection
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