Here I stand underneath
You, my dearest mother,
With such disappointment
And horror at my life
In this dark, twisted world—
Ready to climb on back,
Because I’ve seen enough.
I have come to lament
The salvation I’ve tried
To bring to a cruel world.
They’ve returned to the same
Hatred that shed my blood;
The world is still a sore
That scores wealth off the poor,
Gives love to those who hate,
Hates those who stand for love,
Gives life to the rotten
And rots out the living.
Father, please feel the angst
I pour on my mother.
Take back this broken plan,
Take back this broken plan,
For we were mistaken
In pretending the way
Was not a huge deluge.
One, then two, and then three,
I pray to my mommy
For umbilical rope.
Now four, then five, and six,
Knowing this can’t be fixed,
Back in your womb, I go.
I’m not their Valentine
Because they get presents
On my wintry birthday.
Six hundred sixty-six
Reasons why I’d rather
Reverse my birth this day.
© 2025 Tristan Robert Lange. All rights reserved.
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What a strong poem that speaks with biblical power but in contradiction and heresy in the ear of the rigid and cries out to the listener of earthly pains and perceived injustice. A wonderful write deserving of a fave
Thank you, my friend. Yes, I imagine some will not be able to see past their rigidity to feel the broader emotions being conveyed in this poem. That is what it is. Thank you so much, Soren, for your thoughtful analysis and thoughts. I always value it! ❤️🙏
Well that caught me by surprise, a very powerful tale of pain, suffering and perceived injustices. I am not of religious beliefs but i get the biblical references in the write. Very well expressed
Thank you, my friend! Glad it caught you by surprise and that it delivered. I am also glad the Biblical references came through, though I am sure not everyone will be thrilled with the direction! 🤣 That's art. Again, much appreciated, Tobani! ❤️🙏
You are very welcome
if anyone can explain to me why this reminds me so much of the artwork of the late great Hieronymus Bosch I would very much appreciate it .. thank you in advance of an avalanche of responses .. Cheers ..
I will let others weigh in on that, but as for me: YAY!!! Lol! I am humbled. ❤️🙏 Thank you, Neville!
So much pain in this write to wish a retreat back into the womb as though time on earth had not existed. A tormented write with references to 666 which gave me the chills. A strong delivery here Tristen. All the best poet.
Thank you so much, Cassie. Yeah, this one goes there, and it developed out of two different concepts for two different poems, but the more I wrote it, the more I realized they were meant to be one. Thank you so much for your time and thoughtfully astute feedback, my friend! ❤️🙏
You’re on a roll! Reminds me of those special dice, like the D&D ones for som3 reason. But don’t mind me. Lol. 🙏🏻🕊
No minding here. Any reference to D&D is a welcome one to me! Thank you so much, my friend. Glad it delivered! ❤️🙏
That it did! 🙏🏻🕊
Tristan, I recently read a writer-teacher saying that most of this humanity has no interest in awakening. And never will have. When I look around me, I feel this is indeed, true. Why are they not interested? I have no idea. Perhaps a clue lies in the "Power Law," where, for example, only a few seeds out of thousands become fully grown trees.
What are those famous lines from Ben Yeshua?
13 “Enter through the narrow gate. For wide is the gate and broad is the road that leads to destruction, and many enter through it.
14 But small is the gate and narrow the road that leads to life, and only a few find it."
Great write!
Amen. Great commentary and great questions, my friend. I am so glad the poem delivered and certainly share in your musings. Much appreciated! ❤️🙏
Thought-filled social commentary, I find this all too true, beautifully expressed.
Thank you, my dear friend. I am glad it delivered! Your time and your thoughts are always appreciated! ❤️🙏
Wow. Powerful work.
Thank you, Thomas. Much appreciated, my friend. I apologize for the delay. I came down with a nasty cold and I am just emerging on the other side. Thanks again!
Yes, life can be scary as well as a sad, hurtful place and hiding away would seem so much easier but then again what would it be like never experiencing emotion. Wow, you made me think this morning..lol Thanks for the read Tristan!
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You are welcome, my friend! Glad the poem delivered and got you thinking! ❤️🙏
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