From those broken threads to the left off rustles
We all grew up from that corner of our hustle
Where minds are calmer and the breaths can relay
Where nobody wins, we just let it sway
Yes, we still get played on our set of delays
But no one is ours, and that's all there is to say
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This is a very good write with a weaving of words and rhyme as well as meaning that can be taken as a metaphor. Very nice
Thankyou so much for your constant support and positive feedback dear poet..I am glad that you liked it...
“Broken threads” : hints, suggestions we followed but which led nowhere.
“Where minds are calmer” : there is some part of us that is free from battles
“The breaths can relay where nobody wins” : something in us keeps us going, even when there is apparent loss around us.
“We just let it sway” : we let go; letting go; letting go is a device of coping, of moving on from that which cannot be achieved or which torments us. We let things go the want they want to.
“ Yes, we still get played on our set of delays” : delays have consequences; but we cannot help it.
“But no one is ours” : there is always a human compulsion to own things or even people. We want to take control of people, even those close to us. This is an inherent human nature but can also be seen in other forms of life. Animals will fight to defend their “territories.” It’s ownership not only of living beings, but also of things, dwellings, nests, jobs, property, etc.
A lot of philosophy in these six lines... Soman Ragavan.
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Firstly thankyou fellow poet, for this deep analysis and comprehension of my poem, and secondly, you have elaborated it wonderfully .. a poem we all can relate to as we get older by this passing sun..there has never been much to any thing in life but its the ideology of those rushing waves, the vast sands and those seeping grains and what they weighs upon us...glad you liked it...
I enjoyed the clever nature of this write, which you interpret for a few meanings, well written
Thankyou
You are very welcome
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