The blows fall like phantom rain, a ceaseless, stinging tide, each drop a memory, a word, a glance that strips away my pride. Why this yearning for a love that hangs just out of reach, a star I cannot hold? A normal family, a whispered prayer against the encroaching cold.
I chase the shadows, phantom limbs of belonging, grasping at empty air, for faces that reflect indifference, a silent, hollow stare. They carve a canyon in my soul, these architects of pain, Repeating the mantra of my worthlessness, again and again and again.
My sister, a mirror reflecting a stranger's judging eyes, My sister-in-law, a chorus chanting insidious, sugar-coated lies. My stepfather, a wall built high, cemented with disdain, And those, the unseen puppeteers, whose hatred flows down through my name.
My mother, a fractured compass, spinning wildly, lost and far, The final thread that tethers me teeters near a broken star. I feign a stoic indifference, a mask of careless ease, But her vacant gaze, a bottomless pit, swallows me piece by piece.
This ache, a constant, throbbing drumbeat in the marrow of my bones, A symphony of sorrow played in desolate, echoing tones. I crave the void, a silent hush, a blanket dark and deep, Where pain dissolves, and feeling fades, and weary souls can sleep. For what is fleeting joy, a fragile, butterfly's kiss, Against the crushing weight of this relentless, heartless abyss?
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I can feel every bit of your words. They came alive in me. i can hear your voice right in my ears , down to my heart. But i don't know if these are poetic magic by you or you are really sharing your pains. I want to say "It Okay, not to be okay" it okay passing through pain. It okay to stay strong. This abyss you see shall fade.
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“faces that reflect indifference…” : if it is not indifference, they are actively betraying you.
“carve a canyon in my soul…” very deep, poetical words, transmitting powerful feelings.
“architects of pain…” : it’s pain actively made and dished out.
“Repeating the mantra of my worthlessness, again and again and again…” : non-stop breaking you down, ramming down your throat that you are “worthless.”
Sister, sister-in-law and stepfather, all conspiring to destroy you little by little.
“puppeteers” : other join in the war against you.
“fractured compass…” : something that can never take you to a safe road.
“The final thread that tethers me teeters …” : your last hope, that which was supposed to be the shoulder on which you could take refuge, turns against you.
“feign a stoic indifference…” : indifference come someone near is crushing.
“her vacant gaze…” : the face tells a true story, clearer than words. The vacant gaze says that all relationship has been destroyed. This is why you are being “swallowed piece by piece.”
“the marrow of my bones…” : the utmost depth of you.
“I crave the void…” : family is supposed to bring support. But here it is the opposite. Thus, you are driven to aspire for solitude.
“feeling fades…” : it is numbed feelings that will give you repose, in the circumstances.
“ fleeting joy…” : most of the time joy is something fleeting.
“butterfly's kiss…” : a powerfully poetic turn of phrase. A butterfly is soft and fragile. So are its movements. It can hardly break anything. Therefore, a butterfly’s kiss is something most delicate
“relentless, heartless abyss” : this summarises the life you are living.
Overall, this is a powerful poem full of deep human experiences. You have found the right words and expressions to describe what you are going through. I suggest that you submit this poem to an Artificial Intelligence platform (eg ChatGPT) for analysis. Best wishes. Soman Ragavan.
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A passionate write the pain and emotions can be strongly felt as you read the write , it's ok to not be ok. Very well written and expressed
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