Someone was sitting in the boat,
he was smoking a clear cigarette.
I didn’t know what I got
in this silhouette…
He looked at the natural mirror, and said:
‘If you imagine the time, it’s
probably looking like water.
It also fills space and flows’,
Before you know it life is gone.
Most take no account of hours
Merging with the reflections,
tears become a trace.
Anxious thoughts are unwelcome guests.
They come without knocking, but not alone…
There’s always something else, vague images
like a shadow of forgotten illusion.
He asked: ‘Who are you? Are you real?
Are you a ghost that lives at the bottom of a dream?’
All dissolves, there’s emptiness within.
Existence flows by as quickly as a river.
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Author:
lostinescapism (
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- Comment from author about the poem: The concept of poem: The poem is dedicated to Joseph Brodsky, who said that water is a symbol of time. He explored the image of water from various perspectives. The setting of the work is Venice, where the lyrical subject finds himself in a canoe. He encounters a being that emerges from the river during his journey. Brodsky (the lyrical subject) explains to the lyrical character the connection between water and time. The title is a reference to the text ‘Don’t leave your room, don’t commit that fateful mistake…’.
- Category: Reflection
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Comments2
So many symbols in this splendid piece. Reflections in water and time. The mirror that time gives us to see ourselves change. There is a softness to water and it is reflected in the tone of the poem, There is a harness of water that like time wears all things away. There is a cycle to water as it evaporates, condenses, rains down only to evaporate again, just as time does the same to all living things. A most wonderful poem
Thank you so much for this detailed comment! It’s my first poem, which is written in English, so i was a bit nervous to publish it in social media 🙏🏻
Know what you mean I published one in Portuguese and felt the same way.
Welcome to MPS 🙏🏻🕊
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