I sift the giant firmament
And its genteel frames
As the clouds are shearing up...
-And the shapeless shatters the bays.
Recently, I passed a dry rot,
Tongue-lashing in a driveling way,
Not knowing that dubiety is dubious in the fray.
Clacking with the claimant,
Circumspect, courteous, ripe.
Turns into a drupe,
As fraternal is to fraternize.
This circlet means I own you.
My heart beats against its frames,
Running through the notch between mountains,
Kindling the flames.
As the smoke rises,
It lightens from its domain,
And the atmosphere conceals it as a dungeon.
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Author:
Softens (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: My poem is mainly about matrimony, exploring the uncertainty and hesitation that can surround commitment. In some way, I just wanted to point out a different way to understand a part of this poem. Recently, I passed a dry rot, tongue-lashing in a driveling way, not knowing that dubiety is dubious in the fray. Clacking with the claimant, Circumspect, courteous, ripe. Turns into a drupe, as fraternal is to fraternize. "I recently came across decay, harshly criticizing in a rambling manner, unaware that uncertainty is truly unreliable in conflict. Arguing with the one making a claim, careful, polite, and fully developed. Like a fruit that has ripened and formed a solid core, just as being brotherly naturally leads to forming strong bonds." (Sometimes I don't fully understand what I write but I hope this helps?.. It's kind of like an abstract poetry)
- Category: Love
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Comments2
Full of symbols and most interesting lines. This was helped some by the author's note. Nicely written
Took me a ton of editing and redoing XD
The note helps guide the reader to the poem's meaning; however, the poem itself could be interpreted in various ways, which enhances its power. Thought-provoking, image rich, symbolic. A fave. Welcome to MPS, my friend!
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