The atmosphere we breathe—
not thin, but saturated with life,
bringing blessings along the way.
Our lives became an inward flight through time,
piercing through challenges and trials.
We smiled—
like a flare burning bright in the sky,
rising until it lit up our lives.
Even the eclipse of time
couldn’t hold us back.
The moments we lived—
some collapsed,
others bloomed—
like a supernova
flashing bright in our souls.
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Author:
rrodriguez (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I was challenged to write a poem with these words: atmosphere, flight, flare, eclipse, supernova. The challenge was not to write about the theme of space or flight. I thought about it and started to write and the poem came along.
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Comments2
A lovely poem Rrodriguez you were able to turn cosmic terms into something relationship oriented and meaningful. Very nice and a fave
Thank you, Soren! I'm working on a workbook about writing poems, and they give you these challenges. I appreciate you reading my poem and commenting on it.
You rose to the challenge very well, a lovely write of the blooming of a relationship, enjoyed the read
Thank you for your comments. I appreciate you taking a moment of your time to read my poem. Thank you!
You are very welcome
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