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Now is the time.
Now is the time.
Half A Heart.
I decided to give half my heart away.
Sliced carefully in two on an optimistic day.
Equal halves.
Good and bad.
Happy and sad.
Then it dawned upon me one day.
I had given the wrong half away.
Tobani May 2025.
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Tobani / Nataiella (Pseudonym) (
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A clever and fun poem that plays with the mind. Which half did you give away? Were you throwing out the bad and kept it by mistake or were you giving someone a present of the good and kept it by mistake? A fun read in rhyme no less. Fave
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This is very clever.The metaphor of actually giving your heart away is very powerful.And giving the wrong half is funny.I smiled at theat.
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You're downright hilarious! The pessimistic half was left behind to drown in characteristic style and you were left wringing your hands. Gorgeous. Excellently rendered with superb imagery, a subtle humor and a haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
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Good write. Sometimes there is a very thin line between the good and the bad. Also on later reflection, I sometimes flip my opinion on which is which.
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As the old saying goes " hindsight is 20/20". I love the way you have projected this. Clever and witty!
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Very clever and wise. We could all befall the same fate in our struggles to make life better. - Phil A.
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Damn, Tobani…this one cut clean. ✂️ The rhythm pulled me in, but it’s that turn—“the wrong half”—that hits like a gut punch. Simple. Surgical. Devastating. You said more in eight lines than most can in eighty. Respect, my friend. 🌹👏
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You are most welcome. You too!
We all make mistakes, Tobani but this was a mighty one. A succinct verse rounded to perfection with a delightful sprinkle of humour. Excellent!
Kind regards,
Tony.
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Excellent write
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You're welcome
Get off - you wouldn't be here if you had done the wrong thing😆
A neater poem I haven't seen in a while - fun, (perhaps) serious message. Enjoyed muchly.
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But it will grow back Tobani and your heart will be there for all.
Andy
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No matter how you sliced it, there was no right half.
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Let’s go find it
Nicely penned
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