Notice of absence from Poetic Licence
Now is the time.
Now is the time.
Access Denied.
Eyes are Tired.
Softly Closing.
Short Breaths.
Heavy.
Gasping.
Mine's troubled.
Turmoil Turning.
Rewinding life.
Losses.
Loves.
Mistakes.
Regrets.
Pain.
Hurt.
On full loop.
As in life.
Brink of insanity.
Heart Savaged.
Bleeding.
Hurting.
Pleading.
Rejected.
Wasted.
Fearful.
Needs Healing
Thoughts Turn To.
Remorse.
Forgiveness.
Healing.
Redemption.
Salvation.
From hell.
Soul Longing For.
Light.
Compassion.
Understanding.
Guidance.
Protection.
Safety.
Arriving at.
Destiny.
Expecting a.
Welcome.
Kindness.
Forgiveness.
Understanding.
A New Start.
Safety.
Eternal Peace.
Journey Ending.
Gates Are.
Opened.
Bearded man.
No room.
Full house.
Access denied.
Directed To.
The.
Basement floor.
Tobani June 2025.
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Tobani / Nataiella (Pseudonym) (
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I thought you meant on here, that you could not be verified. In which case, you're not human! lol.
Thank you, have fun
You talkin' about me.
Tobani this one has the feel of a train or metro ride each announcement coming over the speaker. I don't buy that the final destination is overloaded though after having watched people down here. More likely the basement is overloaded. A fun read
Thank you, have fun
This was a very engrossing read.EAch word leading the the next and making the reader think about each idea,Very clever .
Thank you, have fun
Preemptive strike - I'm always having fun one way or (sometimes obscure) another. One of several motivations for being here.
Thank you, may the rest of your day be fullfilled, oh and have fun
Tobani…this one tore right through me. 😔 The pacing—line by line—mirrors the descent, the pleading, the hope, and finally…the blow. And the ending is cold. Crushing. Perfectly delivered. You gave voice to the quiet anguish so many carry but rarely articulate. Powerful, painful, and unforgettable. 🌹👏
Thank you for your kind feedback, very much appreciated
You are very welcome. I am sorry for the delayed response. Sketchy internet here. In fact, I am on my hotspot right now using data! I am not sure even where I left off on comments. 🤣
Excellent write
Thank you, very much appreciated
You're welcome
The password is found in the tears of a repentant heart.
Thank you for your comment, much appreciated
Much of us are quite befuddled by the afterlife 🕊️🙏🏻
Thank you for your comment, very much appreciated
Most welcome 🙏🏻 🕊
Nice, PL. I don't know how far down that 'basement floor' is, but I think I might end up there as well. You have encapsulated a lifetime into this poem, and i felt the last lines were referring to the final judgement. A most enjoyable read. - Phil A.
Thank you, enjoy the rest of your evening
Exquisitely poignant with excellent imagery and so beautifully and charmingly rendered I want to take you by the shoulders gently and remonstrate with you by name, pleading with you. Thank you very much for sharing.
Thank you kindly, very much appreciated
I will meet you Tobani and we will find our own way to the future.
Andy
Thank you
Great write 💯
Well done!!
Thank you, have a wonderful weekend
that was indeed sad - i hope redemption and relief are out there somewhere
enjoyed the write..
Thank you, very much appreciated
my pleasure
have a good day
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