The gall makes the pear tremble
do not distract me
feel the whistle
and the bell
avoiding
they shoot glances from above
I walk, in my hand
my furrows shine
just as the stars
march in file
to the source
order and chaos superior
-"as above
so below."
What is the exact moment
when the sun sets?
Those with eyes are not warned.
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Author:
Pari4 (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: On the way to the tree of designs, don't distract me, don't be distracted!
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Cryptic is the word that comes to mind. Metaphor falls out of these lines. A lovely write
Well, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Perhaps sometimes the voice encodes the message too much, and it seems difficult. Perhaps I often feel that way too, until I finally get around to understanding it. Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving your words of support! Best regards.
I am being honest I am finding this a very cryptic write, not sure I have got it all yet, but am working on it, enjoyed the read
I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'm so glad you can or need to read it again. Sometimes the voice is guilty of over-encoding it, trying to convey what it can't find words to describe and decipher. Thank you for taking the time to read and leave your encouragement. Best regards.
You are very welcome
This wonderful poem feels like a vision walking itself into language, each line half-anchored in the earth, half reaching for the stars. I can't say I fully understood it all, but I don’t need to understand it all to feel it. Will be reading this one again, for sure. That last question lingers like smoke. Another striking piece, my dear friend. 🌹👏
Wow like these, your words fall from heaven at this time. I am very happy that you enjoyed it. This time the voice was too enigmatic, he took work. Thank you as always for reading and leaving your words of breath. They are very valuable. Kind regards
For me, nothing can be too enigmatic. I love a good mystery! 🤣 Seriously though, you are most welcome. And I am glad that my words made you feel heaven. That makes my day and makes me feel the same, my friend!
Great write
Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving your words of encouragement. Best regards.
You're welcome
Wonderful imagery, I'm thinking each reader gets their own imagination with this one, I quite see nature human and mother. 🌹
Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving your words of encouragement. They're crucial to my continued improvement. I completely agree. Everyone will share their own experiences. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Best regards.
still trying to decipher the message here...
Well, I'm glad then. Thank you so much for taking the time to read. I hope you enjoyed it. Best regards.
welcome always a pleasure..
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