The soundtrack
of your autumn coughs
Bubble hums and dances
to the beat of her honey and chocolate sponge cake
touches her nose twice
then her essence vanishes
among ninja lies.
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Author:
Pari4 (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Don't get distracted, you might miss its fleeting brilliance by letting yourself talk to yourself.
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Comments3
A bubble submerged or better yet one on a mirror the form of the poem. On top nature then the mirror of man made delight and beneath humanity and the hidden lies. Well done and superbly crafted.
Wow, what a deep and detailed analysis! I'm so glad you connected with the text in such a way. And even more so that you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving your words of encouragement. Best regards.
You're most welcome
The Deceit amongst humanity that lays beneath the beauty of nature, very nicely crafted write, enjoyed the read
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Here's my contribution to humanity. Don't try to understand it; it's art. Enjoy beauty, don't force it. It might hide like a snail's eye when touched. Thank you so much for stopping by. Best regards.
You are very welcome
Beautiful imagery, light and airy, almost fairy like. Thoroughly enjoyed!
Well, I'm so glad you connected so much with the text. I'm so grateful you took the time to read and leave your words of encouragement. They help me continue to improve. A pleasure from me. Best regards.
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