Land of bandits
arid desert and slums
little pariah piloting
his two wheels lift him
float and he makes his way
remembers the message
The breeze caresses freedom
the face of innocence
flies zigzags over stones
makes a feint
to the verdurous ditch
waits swampy, he knows
one of these days, trust
will give you a push
Don't get distracted singing
you crossed the fourth without looking
the dust in his wake
isn't amused
your guardian angel snorts
their expensive wings pay
a tiny heartbeat
a noble little bell heart
Don't remember that you forgot
the message, the commission:
-was it chicken or cabbage?
Disguising a "I'll be back soon" attitude,
he takes off at once, so that he doesn't blush,
the shameful mockery and the little neighbor,
the merchant's laughter is only interrupted to continue:
-Take note, don't be foolish!
a new message to forget
in the oval furrow, back and forth.
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- Comment from author about the poem: The little pariah has the memory of a duck, but he loves to pedal, flies to you and forgets again.
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In its hidden metaphors and symbols hides a feeling in this poem. Well written and creative. Nicely done
I'm so glad you found it this way. A short story about the adventures of "Paria" and his ship. A bit nostalgic for the old neighborhood, and the old world. Thanks for stopping by and leaving your words of support! Best regards.
You are most welcome
Now this a thinker with much hidden meaning, its like the devil burrowing into your mind,always letting you know he will be back, enjoyed the read
I understand, there's a lot of translation that misses the references I've attempted. I hope you found it enjoyable anyway. Thank you so much for taking the time to read. Best regards.
Always find them enjoyable
Could be way off however I liked it so much u will try
The little pariah appears to love his bike
Amidst the bandits and slums his innocence seems to give him a pass
He seems helpful but as soon as he starts pedal everything else takes a back seat
Even his guardian angel snorts on frustration
The chicken or cabbage line is great
Anyway
I thoroughly enjoyed this read
Wow, thank you so much for stopping by and for your words of appreciation and understanding. I'm so glad to know you connected with the text in this way, or at least the attempt you made. It's a pleasure to know you share the sentiment. Best regards.
You describe the little pariah in charming detail. He flies on his wheels of freedom, where it's all about the joy of the journey even if he forgets what it's for. Thoroughly enjoyed!
Wow, I'm so glad you connected with the text in such a way! Thanks for stopping by and leaving your words of appreciation. It was a pleasure sharing Paria's antics with you. Best regards.
Your poem explores themes of freedom, innocence, and the struggles of daily life in a challenging environment. It reflects on the complexities of navigating both physical and emotional landscapes, juxtaposing youthful optimism with the harsh realities of existence.
Well, I'm very glad you like it. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and share your valuable feedback. It's a pleasure to share it. Best regards.
I see courage and determination to have freedom amongst all the things that could hold one back. Wonderful. ๐น
Wow, well, I'm so glad you found it that way. I really appreciate you taking the time to stop by and leave your words of encouragement. It's a pleasure from me. Best regards.
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