Is it too soon to love you?
Feels like the heart's got its own clock,
Ticking fast.
Is it too soon to love you?
Stars that shine quick in the sky.
Is it too soon to love you?
Stars burn bright without delay.
The moon just smiles and drifts away...
Never asking why.
Heartbeats race like the wind. Is it too soon to love you?
Time bends when I'm near,
Like the light through a prism's hue.
Feelings bloom like flowers,
is it too soon to love you?
No need for reasons cue...
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Author:
ROSHI (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: September 14th, 2025 16:47
- Comment from author about the poem: I have been dating this beautiful woman for almost two months. We agreed to go slow, especially since I am not that far out of a divorce. I wrote this to her, along with a letter explaining a bit about me and what to expect, and what I desire.
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A good question that only the author can answer. Never too soon to love but maybe too soon to commit. A great write
she could answer it...lol...thank you for your comment.
You are welcome
Okay, a lot of brilliance in this poem. I absolutely adore these images and metaphors. This poem does a good job of conveying the sweet pain of the tantalization of love. It is great. These lines are especially poignant - "Time bends when I'm near, / Like the light through a prism's hue. / Feeling's bloom like flowers, / Is it too soon to love you?"
Also I feel like some of this poem was written in meter but I cannot quite tell. It's like WANTING to be in meter, which if you did that on purpose is brilliant because it would correspond with how you want to be in love.
Only a couple suggestions, though.
The last line is moderately confusing and I think its preceding line would make for a stronger ending. I think you may have just left it in for the rhyme.
Omit "Feels like" in the second line. What affect does it really produce? It negates the power of the metaphor. "My heart's got its own clock" would do just fine.
I really like this. Delightful metaphors in here, seriously man, like damn. Keep it up, I look forward to reading future stuff. 👍👍
Thank you so much, my goal is to eventually turn some writting into songs. I just bought a guitar so I can learn to play.
That's awesome! Next John Denver here fr fr
What is love?
Beautifully impatient in its repetition. I can feel the sense of falling in love easily and quickly quite perfectly. I wish you luck.
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