"Expository"—
landed like a thunderclap.
The expert,
brows crinkled in disgust,
pronounced:
"Revealing too much."
Instinctively, my hand
went to the fly,
seeking assurance that it was done up—
no exposure of offending body part.
With that assurance,
I am trying to ascertain—
what did I expose
that should have remained hidden?
"Too prosy"—
another thunderbolt.
Prose and poetry,
both in English.
How do I know
which is what?
"No ambiguity and layered meaning"—
an invective assailed my mind,
involving the anatomical region
of a four-legged animal.
The world is trying to banish ambiguity
for survival—
and he wants things wrapped in it.
Who is this pompous fu*k?
"No literary merit"—
another beautiful verdict from
an exceptional mind.
I am still scratching my half-bald pate—
what literary merit does oxygen have?
Pssst... it never appears in poems,
yet, keeps the poets alive.
"No density"—
another slap of disgust.
I was trying to hide my elation.
Hydrogen, lowest density of all—
if my poem has no density,
a sure win of the Nobel Prize.
Brothers and sisters,
hope you laughed through it all.
Didn't feel like leaving
laugh tracks—
as they do in television.
And the artistic wall
smiles its layered smiles,
dipped in sauce of ambiguity...
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The chain of thought is fascinating as is the humor of associations made. It is so true that I can't remember the last time I heard oxygen mentioned in a poem nor hydrogen yet combine the two and water appears quite frequently almost as much as tears and the flow of sadness. A wonderful poem my friend and a fave.
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With "Expository", etc and of course the complaint of ""No ambiguity and layered meaning" I've after much difficulty identified him - he's an art critic, and while I'm no fan and categorically believe wrong the old adage "Those who can do; those who can't teach" I do believe it's corollary with respect to art critics may well have some merit.
Entertained no end.
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I am glad you had a bit of fun. That was my aim. The whole thing could be blamed on my affinity towards authors like P. G. Wodehouse. The impulse of making people smile attacks me at times, yesterday was one of those. I wrote a few 'serious' poems and had to let off steam by bringing some smiles.
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My friend, this had me laughing…the thunderclap critiques, the fly-check, the density turned Nobel Prize. You’ve flipped pompous judgment into playful defiance, and that’s powerful. A joy to read. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
Thank you very much. Comments such as yours make me feel elated. I wanted to bring in some smiles by being silly. Seems I had some success.
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Clever, satirical, and richly self-aware. It humorously critiques the sometimes arbitrary and contradictory judgments of literary experts. Lovely written poetry. ✨
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Humorous. Reminds me of reading or hearing bad reviews about yourself and snarkily shutting them down behind the screen, or perhaps their back.
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