Trembling,
Gasping,
I feel you
Dance across my skin,
Painting me
With your touch.
Fluttering,
Floating,
Brush strokes of colour,
Enveloping me,
My mind lost
Inside the music.
A peak,
I whimper
As I come undone,
Falling backwards
Onto the cusp
Of oblivion.
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Vaguely sensuous, seductive obscurity, erotic illusion, almost sexual but vividly artistic. Nice
It's not right honestly. I've been going over it again all morning and can't figure it out. Will edit and update when I get a chance. It doesn't have the pizzazz factor yet. But thank you Soren! ❤
You are most welcome
It may not have the pizzazz factor
But it seems so real and emotional
Says more than I believe you are giving it credit for
I for one loved the read
Thank you ❤
That's so kind of you.
I have just been reading through yours, and read "You Dancing?"
I relate so much haha. Your poetry is fantastic.
I'm so glad you can relate to what I wrote
But sad you experienced it lol
Many thanks Karoline
Those words are more than just kind they are inspiring
Extremely grateful
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