Capitalization no longer warranted

sorenbarrett

At times I wonder about human blunder, strange thoughts come to mind
With all their spice, in a Mexican restaurant do they serve ice, or is it maligned
So hard and cold, set in a mold, a foreign glass breaks out in a sweat
You get less for what you pay as it melts away, by law, the order is what you get

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  • Teddy.15

    Worth reading many times as it hits the reader with each read it brings the power of the words. Super poetry. 🌹

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you Teddy for the read and understanding that ICE is not too welcome in Mexican restaurants now days

      • Teddy.15

        I.C.E is an appropriate word for what they represent, and all communities should ban them, out of respect for those shot dead. 🌹 I don't like to tar everyone with the same Brush however doesn't the whole situation stink.

        • sorenbarrett

          I take no ice in my drinks, at times there is a fly in the cube.

        • Soman Ragavan

          Clever composition. The hot spicy food needs ice, which should be served along the dish. Mexican food is known to be hot and spicy.

          • sorenbarrett

            Thank you Soman for your read and comment yes and ICE is not something desired in such establishments

            • Soman Ragavan

              Clever play on word... Yes, ice will be overwhelmed !!!....

            • Thomas W Case

              The imagery here is sly and observational—mundane details stretched into small philosophical questions.
              That ice becomes almost existential, melting under scrutiny, makes the ordinary feel surprisingly sharp and witty.

              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks so much Thomas I deeply appreciate your feedback and support

              • rebellion_in_sanity

                "a foreign glass breaks out in a sweat" - who could have written that!! A fave

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much Rebellion I feel more like your moniker each day. Appreciate the read and review as well as gracious comment

                  • rebellion_in_sanity

                    Perhaps when the reign of sanity
                    gasps for breath,
                    the sane ones come to bat.
                    The bouncers and beamers
                    whizz past with violent intent
                    but the sane ones hit them out of field.
                    And thus they say
                    rebellion is born.

                    Am I wrong?

                    • sorenbarrett

                      I have been hit out of the field too many times to count, maybe that is were the rebellion started

                    • orchidee

                      Good write SB.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thanks Orchi I told you I'd give you more ideas for KP's food lots of spice and ice with a fly in it would be nice

                        • sorenbarrett

                        • Allie561

                          A very powerful poem with a hidden meaning. Ice unfortunately can’t tolerate spice and as we all know, milk is what really cures it. Great poem Soren.

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks so much Allie your words are most encouraging.

                            • Allie561

                              You’re very welcome Soren.

                            • Tristan Robert Lange

                              Soren, this is smart wordplay with teeth. Ice melting, value shrinking, presence becoming unwelcome…the metaphor slides seamlessly into current realities without losing its footing. It’s understated, pointed, and effective. Well done!🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                              • sorenbarrett

                                You are so kind my friend and it is most appreciated. I can not let go of the idea of a repressive regime in the so called land of the free. I was raised by a conservative father who saw many missions in WWII fighting for freedom but he was a fair man with not an ounce of prejudice in his soul. He is rolling over in his grave and am sure that if alive he would be the first to take arms against such a state.

                                • Tristan Robert Lange

                                  Oh…no doubt. Sadly, conservative no longer seems to mean what it once did. Not even sure conservative is anything but a misnomer nowadays, at least the current iteration of it in power. That’s not to say anything about the term “liberal” and/to whether or not that holds up. And yes, I concur…in fact, the left and the right would have joined together to stand up against what we are now seeing. Not that those times or people were perfect, but much has eroded since then. Anywho, most welcome, Soren.

                                • Vipassana

                                  Nice.

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thank you so much for the read and comment it is important to me

                                  • arqios

                                    capitalisation both of language and economy. A far-reaching meditation, much enjoyed Soren. 🕊️🙏

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      Thanks so much Cryptic I appreciate your read and comment ice seems to bother me these days

                                    • RSM0812

                                      Rules. They are pushed sometimes. This read had a good point of the soverignty of rule makers and the consequences of chains. Remarkable.

                                      • sorenbarrett

                                        Thanks for the read and comment it is most appreciated



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