you need foundation
as time goes on, scrapes the sky
if damaged; rebuild
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Author:
Demar Desu (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: April 9th, 2026 09:08
- Category: Haiku
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How true this is Demar. A house needs repairs as time goes on, new shingles, new pipes, etc. Gotta keep it going though.
Feels like my marriage is like howls moving castle… not pretty but it works
Haha that’s a good way to put it, I hope you can sort out the rough parts.
Well said , so true
I dreamt this poem and woke up and immediately wrote it… now I should go brush my teeth
Marriage sucks, it's true
Every now and again
husband cleans the floor 😁
On your second line may I just show what I would have put?
You need foundations
as time goes on, houses fall
If damaged, rebuild
I love 5/7/5 and yours is a great one but it's always good to have ideas 💡
Thank you for the response, I definitely like to see options and how I can twist these letters better..I’m glad you decided to keep my third line
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Surreal Demar and a great image presented. Well done
💯 Truth! Well done, sir!
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