Unrepented

sorenbarrett

I a selfish dove, to wish for peace when so many hawks want war
Greedy as a stream, to share with weeds poor when the rich build a dam, water to store
I am slothful not to fight against the ants that want to bite
A beam, with too much pride to bend and let the storm inside
With gluttony my eyes devour the beauty of each blooming flower
On wings of rage watching justice in a cage

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    Good write my friend, and a great message, much enjoyed

  • orchidee

    Good write SB.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Orchi it is appreciated

    • David Wakeling

      This certainly digs deep for emotions. All the deadly sins are covered here.There is a sense of despair that quite understandable.An interesting work amigo

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you David for the read and comment it is most appreciated compadre

      • Tristan Robert Lange

        Soren, this has the feel of a moral self-examination filtered through nature and metaphor. Doves, hawks, dams, storms, flowers, justice in a cage…everything circles around the difficulty of remaining compassionate without becoming hardened. Strong and thoughtful piece, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks so much Tristan for your read and understanding comment it is as always most appreciated

        • Friendship

          Your poem explores themes of internal conflict and moral struggle, specifically the tension between the desire for peace and the realities of a violent world. The feelings of guilt and complicity, as you acknowledge your own selfishness and inaction in the face of injustice.

          • sorenbarrett

            Thanks my friend for the read and comment.

            • Friendship

              You're welcome, my friend

            • Lorenz

              I am wary of those white doves of peace who always manage to look spotless...

              • sorenbarrett

                They will shit on you every time. Thanks for the read my friend

              • Kevin Hulme

                Sometimes we are Raging against the Storm, trying to be heard. Good Write.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much Kevin you words are most appreciated

                • Teddy.15

                  Powerful and a wish many desire. 🌹

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks my friend for the review and comment as always it is most appreciated and valued

                  • Neville


                    It's a jungle out there & despite being surrounded by both internal & external conflict & constraining & compelling forces, I for one have thus far survived .. but it isn't easy, is it .. thanks so much for the ride .. sorenbarrett .. I now plan on cancelling my next safari in favour of spending some quality time deep in my own bunker .. Neville 😎⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐👍

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks Neville for the review and comment and yes my friend I too have just returned from my motherland visit to my more serene country home.

                    • Waiting for Silence

                      Loved how honestly this piece reflects on our inner struggles while still feeling deeply human and relatable.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        You are very kind. Thank you for your supportive comment it is deeply appreciated

                      • mohammad ali

                        So beautiful, dear! So beautifully described a deep fact of paradox!

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you so much for your read and kind words of support they are appreciated



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