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sorenbarrett

Scrapes on the floor from those that have passed here before
Memories of the past engraved as marks that will last
Some shallow some deep each a remembrance does keep
A gouge, heel skid black, peeling varnish, aging crack

 

Scuffs from an open door, new bride's footprint on varnished floor
One from haste a Christmas meal to taste
A black scar of a child's toy car
Scratch from broken glass left after anger's impasse

 

Glazed glare the trail of a rocking chair
Hieroglyphics, letters read, stains of wounds that blead 

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    Marks left upon time and places, much enjoyed

  • orchidee

    Good write SB. KP gives me some verbal 'hieroglyphics' cos I keep dishing up sewage for her! lol.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks Orchi for the read and comment. She must be tired of sewage by now how about giving her a little muck for a change?

      • orchidee

        Yes lol.

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks so much Orchi for the review it is appreciated my friend

          • orchidee

            Dunno why she complains - all that protein for her in the sewage! I say 'You don't realise how generous I am to you with the healthy food I give you, my dear!' lol.

          • David Wakeling

            The evidence of time passing.I see a church floor at Christmas but there is a lot more in this Excellent

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks so much for the review my friend your interpretation and words of support mean a great deal

            • arqios

              The scuffs and damage record the history of decades; our lives written out in the environments that we live in. 🙏🏻🕊️

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you Cryptic for your review. Indeed we leave our marks as do all that we can read in the environment around us. Some are easy to read and others may be faint or difficult to understand. Thanks again my friend

              • Tristan Robert Lange

                Soren, this makes me think about how places absorb us over time whether we notice it or not. Floors, walls, furniture…they quietly carry evidence of our living long after the moments themselves have passed. There’s something deeply human in that realization. Excellent piece, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much Tristan for the read and understanding comment. Yes we write our messages on floors and walls what ever we touch.

                • Friendship

                  Nicely done. The imagery you painted of a worn floor serves as a canvas for the memories and experiences of those who have walked upon it. Your poem reflects on the interplay between physical space and emotional history, revealing how the mundane can hold profound significance. that every mark and scuff tells a story, capturing moments of joy, sorrow, love, and conflict.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you Friendship you have hit it on the head my friend. I deeply appreciate your read and interpretation.

                    • Friendship

                      You're very welcome, my friend

                    • Katie B.

                      Beautiful thought provoking write of how marks leave behind memories. Well written!

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you Katie your words are most appreciated

                      • Doggerel Dave

                        Both great and interesting that you document a change in values towards wear in objects. Indeed most antique dealers today mark as a selling point 'In untouched original condition', this a positive. I like the thought very much, Soren.
                        My only reservation would be those marks indicative of violence in some instances.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thanks so much Dave I deeply appreciate the read and comment and would have to agree with you about the marks of violence, they tend to bring bad memories and sadness but like a sad ending in a book are still written to see.

                        • Kevin Hulme

                          I love it when some Writing on Walls are discovered in an Cathedral or Castle. Voices from the Past.
                          A good Poem.

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks so much Kevin your read and words are most important to me and most appreciated

                          • cully45

                            Interesting poem nice work

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you so much for the read and encouraging comment



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