shared breath

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  sorenbarrett June 29th, 2026 04:59

  This is a marvelous poem well designed that has multiple ways of seeing it. When first looking at it the L written l appeared as an I bringing up Alister Crowley's IO Pan the whole issue of gender and sexuality in love. The title itself is intimate, although we all share breath and reveals at a deeper level the intimacy of all mankind and life in general. The breaking of the words into letter combinations is illustrated well in the last breaking of h ear ts where hear ear and hearts all fall into place. Very nicely done

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    soheil khodaparastiJune 29th, 2026 05:30

    Thank you so much for your thoughtful and generous reading. I am especially grateful for the care with which you engaged the poem’s visual and sonic layers.
    
    I am also delighted that the title resonated with you as both intimate and universal. The shared act of breathing felt to me like a quiet way of suggesting our common humanity, so it is very rewarding to know that came through.
    
    Your close reading of the final fragmentation into “h ear ts” is particularly meaningful. I hoped those overlapping echoes—hear, ear, and hearts—would invite multiple ways of entering the poem, and I am grateful that you noticed them.
    
    Thank you again for taking the time to read so attentively and to share such insightful reflections. Your response means a great deal to me.
    

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    sorenbarrettJune 29th, 2026 06:24

    It is my pleasure. Etymologically I find it interesting that the verb (to be) probably has its origin in the word to breath, which in the most ancient of times was the only way to denote life or living. To breath was to exist, or be alive therefore the name of God I am that I am or life itself.

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  soheil khodaparasti June 29th, 2026 07:28

  Thank you for sharing that—it is a beautiful reflection. I find the connection between breath, life, and being deeply meaningful. The idea that, in ancient understanding, to breathe was synonymous with living is fascinating. It reminds us that existence itself is a profound mystery and that life is both a gift and a continual expression of that sacred reality. I appreciate your sharing this perspective.

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  Friendship June 29th, 2026 19:56

  Well written. Your revolves around the emotional and spiritual bond between two individuals, emphasizing the intimate act of sharing one's breath as a symbol of love and unity.

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    soheil khodaparastiJune 29th, 2026 20:12

    Thank you so much for your thoughtful words. Your kind appreciation means a great deal to me.

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  NafisaSB June 30th, 2026 06:18

  impressive and beautiful.

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    soheil khodaparastiJune 30th, 2026 08:30

    Thank you very much.

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    NafisaSBJuly 1st, 2026 02:30

    glad to read and enjoy - keep writing...