Once upon a playful loss

sorenbarrett

Playful puppy turned dog grown, from loving all now guard teeth on loan
Once kitten now cat what was play now business finding a rat
Child's innocence lost, gums to sharp teeth and tongue the cost
A friendly humming bee now the only focus becomes protecting honey
A tender young rose that with time thorns grows

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    A deep write my friend

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much my friend for the read and comment they are most appreciated

    • Teddy.15

      Wow your metaphor is superb, and yes we can all be changed by circumstances, hopefully for the better yet it's not always the case. 🌹

      • sorenbarrett

        Thanks Teddy for the review and understanding words. Yes growing up is not always better

      • arqios

        No one defends us but ourselves even when we at times delegate that to others. 🙏🕊️

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you Cryptic and that become more evident the older we get and the older relationships get

          • arqios

            Indeed. Most welcome, dear friend🙏🕊️

          • arqios

          • Lorenz

            Let's stop growing before it's too late !

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you Lorenz I would agree but it is already too late.

            • Tristan Robert Lange

              Soren, this really moved me. Growing older so often means developing defenses we never needed at the beginning...and innocence rarely survives without scars. Powerful poem, my friend! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

              • sorenbarrett

                I appreciate the review Tristan and you are right parents usually take care of and protect their young so innocence is preserved but too soon is lost

              • orchidee

                Good write SB.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks Orchi. for the read and comment. I appreciate it

                • orchidee

                • Kevin Hulme

                  Yes it's amazing how some things are Small and grow Large or Dangerous.
                  You buy a little Puppy for the Kids , then next minute its the Hound of the Baskervilles.
                  A fave here .

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you Kevin for adding for adding that angle to this it is most appreciated

                    • Kevin Hulme

                      My Pleasure.

                    • soheil khodaparasti

                      Your poem beautifully captures how innocence evolves into self-protection.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        You have hit it on the head whether the innocence of childhood or in relationships it is all the same. Thank you so much Soheil for the review and interpretation.

                        • soheil khodaparasti

                          You are welcome. It is always my pleasure to read your poems.

                        • Samprikta Paul

                          This felt sweet and cute, while reading, I could imagine animated and Ghibli art. Well written

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you Samprikta for your review and kind support it is appreciated

                          • GenXer Sharon 🙏🍀

                            Beautifully written my friend! Every Rose has a thorn. That last line made me think of this.

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you so much Sharon for the review and most kind words they are deeply valued

                            • 8Blackwidow8

                              I like this (gums to sharp teeth)

                              I like how this describes how we lose so much.

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thanks so much for the read and comment it is deeply appreciated

                              • Nerd

                                So touching I absolutely adore the last line.

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  You are most kind I thank you for the review and encouraging words of support



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