Corrosion

sorenbarrett

A rusted sky falls where the sun descends with a creak of corrosion. Here iron clouds, painted bleeding orange with their stains, run across the horizon. A watercolor bathed by the sea laps at the canvas edge where sand soaks up all emotion. Salt winds brush their texture over undulating dunes as night swallows the land. A few extended bristles poke spying eyes through the dark surface as earth kisses sky and she opens her starry eyes. Night has disrobed her naked beauty.

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  • soheil khodaparasti

    Such a profound paradox: daylight reveals what is visible, while night reveals what is hidden.

    • sorenbarrett

      I truly love your take on this poem Soheil that is a most profound observation and connection. Your brilliance shows through in your poetry. Thank you so much for your read and comment it made my day.

      • soheil khodaparasti

        Thank you for your kind words; they truly mean a lot to me. It is always a pleasure to read and reflect on your poems, which carry such depth, beauty, and meaning.

        • sorenbarrett

          I thank you for reading them

          • soheil khodaparasti

            You are welcome.

          • Paul Bell

            Two views on the contrasting day as the earth turns.
            Maybe a woman walking in and out of someones life.
            Tomorrow brings a different view.

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks so much for your review Paul as always it is most appreciated and valued

            • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

              beautiful

            • Tristan Robert Lange

              Damn, Soren...what a beautifully painted piece. Everything feels textured and tactile, from that corroded evening through the dunes and into the intimacy of night. By the end, darkness isn’t emptiness at all...it’s a revelation. Absolutely loved this, my friend! And they are clearly giving you cooler font choices than me! 🤣 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks so much my friend for the read and kind words they are always most valued. As to the font copied and pasted from my word processor.

              • orchidee

                Good write SB. I give KP rusty stuff. lol

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks Orchi I appreciate it. Give her a bottle of rust remover and a tooth brush it will keep her busy

                • Nerd

                  A rare beauty in the form of words

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you so much for the read and comment it is most appreciated

                  • Kevin Hulme

                    A fine discriptive write. An Impressionist Painting in Words.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks so much Kevin for the review and comment it is deeply appreciated

                      • Kevin Hulme

                        Happy to be of service. 👍

                      • Doggerel Dave

                        Should have got in earlier, but now it has already been said: 'painterly' fits perfectly.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thanks Dave means a lot

                        • GenXer Sharon 🙏🍀

                          What I love most is its cursive!! Elegant and beautiful!

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks so much Sharon your words are most appreciated

                          • cully45

                            Thanks for your comments Soren thy are always appreciated - Regards Owen



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