Closed door

sorenbarrett

It's been so long since I've seen you
I came from far to visit too
I knock but you're not home
So I'll wait until the gloam

 

No sign of your returning
A candle left still burning
Your name remains on your door
But you don't live here anymore

 

Your flowers wilted
A grieving visitor jilted

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  • delusions

    Grief waiting at a door that no longer belongs to the living. Nicely written, my friend.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much for the read and comment my friend it means a lot

      • delusions

        It's my pleasure, Soren 🙂

      • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

        good write my friend

      • David Wakeling

        Oh dear a sad meeting that never happened.So well written.Excellent emotional journey

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you David for the visit and understanding words of support. The grave is cold and the door closed.

        • Thomas W Case

          There’s a damn lonely ache in this, especially that candle still burning while the person is gone. “Your flowers wilted / A grieving visitor jilted” leaves us standing right there on the doorstep with the speaker, with nowhere to go.

          • sorenbarrett

            Thanks so much my friend for the read and comment. Your understanding interpretations is the feeling desired and death has a closed door.

          • Demar Desu

            🙁

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks Demar for the read

            • arqios

              Unsent flowers have the same “shelf life” as the unjilted ones. And yet that failure to launch is testified to by their colour and fragrance. 💐🥀🕊️🙏🏻

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you my friend for the read and comment. Indeed they do and those left on a grave are little appreciated when the occupant is not home.

                • arqios

                  Yes, those are endowed with a sort of double sadness/loss 🪦🥀🕊️🙏🏻👍🏻

                • orchidee

                  But you only saw me yesterday! lol.
                  Boohoo! When one door closes for me, they say 'Don't worry; another door will soon slam in your face!' lol.
                  Can be embarrassing - I called at someone's home after many years. New owners said 'Oh, they died 5 years ago'.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks Orchi appreciate the read and comment yes I did that too but then found it was the wrong house.

                  • Lorenz

                    Everything is conveyed through a palpable mystery...

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks so much Lorenz appreciate the read and comment my friend. All things mysteries now days although not palpable

                    • soheil khodaparasti

                      A deeply haunting poem about absence, longing, and grief. The final line is especially poignant, leaving a lasting sense of loneliness and heartbreak.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you Soheil I deeply appreciate the read and comment. Sometimes we wait too long for a visit

                        • soheil khodaparasti

                          You are welcome. I thank you for your kind words. And yes, sometimes we wait far too long for a visit.

                        • Tristan Robert Lange

                          Soren, this is quietly devastating. The hope of reunion slowly gives way to permanent absence...and those abandoned signs of care leave everything suspended around someone who cannot return. I know that helpless ache all too well. Beautifully done, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks so much Tristan I appreciate your review my friend.

                          • Kevin Hulme

                            Bit of a lonely Ache in this . And Sad .
                            'Your Name remains on your Door' stands out for me.
                            Good Write.

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thanks so much Kevin I appreciate your read and comment my friend

                              • Kevin Hulme

                                Happy to be of service.

                              • Teddy.15

                                Oh such beauty in this poem, inspiring. 🌹

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you my friend, I appreciate your review and most generous and kind words.

                                • Doggerel Dave

                                  The feeling of loss as a relationship, a part of you is no more. Emptiness well expressed there, Soren.

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thanks for your kind understanding Dave spot on and appreciated my friend

                                  • NafisaSB

                                    a wealth of grief in this beautiful poem - well described.

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      Thanks so much Nafisa your words are deeply appreciated



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