Bivariably Obvious
She was more precise
than he was vague ..
But then the closeness
of their horizons
made all the difference
and proved to be
even more worthwhile
to say the least
or to state what was
then becoming obvious ..
Indeed the ricochets
from resounding losses
claimed more
victims en route but
the impact never
felt greater than when
they quietly mouthed
those joint last goodbyes ..
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Author:
Neville (
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- Comment from author about the poem: try to read too deep and you may well drown ..
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Comments5
My high school English teacher warned me about such things. Here the issue is the mounting complexity of layered assumptions as phrase upon phrase adds to previous meaning. Further fogging the picture is the weaving of vagueness and specificity with metaphor, but what emerges from the fog is the sadness of a goodbye only mouthed. Very nicely done my friend it did knot my brain that I will now have to take a break to untangle.
well I did warn thee didn't I eh'
Old habits die hard despite warning labels. Look at cigarettes.
The leeway is the highway to forward movement, it would seem. 👍🏻🕊️
Indubitably sir 😎👍
I should think yer final goodbyes were attended to wth a measure of relief, with which I can only empathise...
On the odd occasion they have come as something of a relief .. sometimes out of the blue and others .. well you know .. 😎👍
You, I have an inkling, misundertood me Neville; 'twas only the arc of the one liaison there, confessed by you, on which I focussed my attention. The whole history of multiple relationships was something, regrettably, I would have been unable to cope with.
Erm, goodbye then - the last line! lol.
Ta O .. N 🏴
Oof, Neville…there is something painfully intimate about a goodbye both people already know is coming. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️
its like being kicked in both nuts innit .. thanks for feeling it my way our Tristan 😎🖤🐈⬛🌻🏴👍
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