I clench my teeth my lips I bite
To drown the force of my Desire
I close my fists and blind my eyes
To quench the thirst of this great fire
With tired hands I wipe my brow
And shake my head, to clear my thinking
Yet, it's too late, I know that now
For want of you my Life is shrinking
I lose myself in crowded places
Hoping to see familiar faces
Knowing that it's too late, you see
For you've become, a part of me
I toss and turn alone at night
Wishing to have your presence there
And yet I know the sun again
Will fan the fire of my Despair
I've tried and tried to live without you
But it's so very hard to do
i'd rather face Hell with all its fire
Than have to face my LOSING you
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So beautifull & sad Soki you touch my heart
Thank you for your beautiful comment. I truly appreciate it. Glad you liked it.
Love, soki
This poem can touch someone at such a personal level, well done.
I cannot ask for anthing better than to touch people with my poem.
Thank you for inspiring me. Love, soki
I like this poem so much I want to rewrite it. Does this site have a poetry workshop? I would like to workshop this poem with you; pointing out what I like and what I would like to change. One of the things I don't like in a poem more often is the over use of words like I, my and and. As you may see most of my poems I have posted are of my older works, poetry is evolution; I wrote poems 10, 12 and more years ago that I am changing today. Do you look at your poetry the same way? If not forget everything I just said. Though everything I said is, "I like the poem."
Your friend... BWP... James...
Hello BWP, Ido not know if this site has a poetry workshop. I go back and read some of my work but don't really change any because I like to see how I change over the years. This particular poem is from a long time ago and i,ve noticed the repetition of some words but the feelings I felt are still there although the circumstances have changed a lot so in this case it serves as toa reminder of a very important part of my life.I am thrilled that you like it and I would like to see how you'd changed it. Please feel free to sent it to me, I'm sure I would love it, soki
Soki... I love to play with poets words and I will. I am rewriting a lot of my works and my wife has told me that she likes the originals. I noticed someone made a comment on your poem I fused in on,saying they liked the original and all I can say to that is I also liked the original if I had not I would not have spent my time on it. I always respect the writers feelings. I wrote a children's book and you can imagine how I felt when a publisher asked me to change the little boy's name. I was pissed and then I changed the name; to know avail the publisher told me they are ready for publishing but just not with them.
BWP... James...
beautiful love poetry! great rhyme and rhythm! sensational effect.
Thank you diamond for your beautiful words. I am so glad you liked it.
May the rest of the week be filled with happiness and love, soki
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