i want to kill you my fear,
but first let me keep you my friend dear,
let me give my mind this prayer,
so that love and compassion i can share.
they ask me what is your dream,
i respond to be happy in ice-cream,
they may laught that what's seem,
but oneday i'll arrive to end this game.
this is my town to be simple,
and for that i'll create my own temple,
so let me create my own example,
and focus on the land of great people.
oneday we all will die,
but first we have to find the key,
the way is not to yourself lie,
so that nothing you will pay.
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Author:
jamal sahraoui (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: my message is to find happiness throught living simple,let go of what you can't control and change what you can so that you can live in peace and harmony
- Category: Spiritual
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Comments1
My dearest poet, I beg your pardon
As in many places lie sheer confusion
Please forgive me for this comment
As I am your true well-wisher dear
Rhyme is not needed for poetry at all
But, to some extent, grammar is a must
I humbly ask you to follow grammar rules
So that you poem will glitter like gold
You possess enough vocabulary surely
But, just a better arrangement is needed
Hope you will take my words sportively
May God bless you to write ever better.
mvvenkataraman
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